All Comments on 'Esmellinda'

First off, I think you had a good idea. The problem is you didn't develop a plot as the story seems to wander aimlessly to an ending that isn't satisfying. I would encourage you to have someone else read your stories for you and offer comments. That would point out things you don't see yourself. Goggle 'narrative ark' to get an idea of how to structure a story.

Best of luck with your next story.

Rachel

I sense you could be a wonderful poet. It’s just a feeling I have. I wish you well in whatever you do since you have obvious talent, I am sure you will succeed.

Thank you, Rachel and Anonymous, for your feedback and encouragement!

You have created an interesting and enticing world!

You have set the stage well, and I look forward to see how you develop this into a story.

Thank you, Paul!