All Comments on 'Every Schoolboy's Dream Ch. 09'

I love the story and can't wait until The Evil One gets her final comeuppance. I could do without the hyphens, though. There was a paragraph that was seven lines that contained a single sentence, stretched out with nine hyphens. It is very distracting.

I'm completely loving this story...

Maybe time to wrap it up. It started great, but now, with the exception of dealing with the old bat, it's become pretty boring.

Time for some baby bumps and the fun of pleasuring those swollen bellies.

Damn, I love this story!

I just can’t get enough of yours series. Everyone is totally enjoyable for different reasons.

You're maybe slightly overdoing it with the hyphens. Otherwise it's great prose.

I second the "time to wrap it up" statement. Spend your time more productively on a new story.

I know it may be sacreligious to say anything like this on a porn site, but the sex is getting in the way of the story. Consider it a compliment to your writing and plotting skills that I'm at least as intrrested in your characters as people as I am their libidos.

More, please!!!!

Well done, though the erotic bits are starting to become repetitive. Would be nice if you'd threw in some mother-daughter lesbic action!

good as always

It's far too dragged out at this point. Over-the-top amounts of sex in place of an actual plot. There's an occasional hint of something going on with the evil grandma but I'm having doubts we'll ever see anything come of that. 9 chapters and there's still no fucking pregnancy yet. Time to wrap this one up and move on. And yeah, have you heard of a comma? Stop using dashes constantly. It's hard to read at times. This - is awkward - to - read. Instead, use commas like this, to break up the flow of a sentence. :)

Still going great but I think I'd like more plot than sex. 5⛤

you lost your plot and are just dragging it out. too redundant