All Comments on 'Exciting Adventurous Experiences Ch. 02'

...my liking, as it is too stilted and grammatically difficult to read.

Further, the story makes sudden, even precipitous turns without any transition.

Finally, you need editorial help badly. You need it from someone for whom English is their first and primary language. Your primary language is not English, and while I make allowances, your errors are far too blatant and occur too often to ignore.

It is normal for writers to spend at least as much time editing their work as in original writing. You might require more time to produce a polished result, but you will gain even greater appreciation from your audience if you can make it indistinguishable from something written by a native English-speaker.

Gud goin...