by Jessmartin
Está bueno. Si te ayuda, los gringos dicen "me vengo" más que el "me corro", sería el verbo "come" en vez de "run".
The story has a good idea, and the flow is okay. I would have someone proof-read for you to help with your English, but overall good work!
Good start if you wanted to make it a series. Could have fun with this new turn of events. Nice twist t9 the story. Cheers