All Comments on 'Family Vegas Trip Ch. 01'

Very hot and well written story. :D

Next time they need to fill her pussy with their seed.

You need a proofreader. Too many grammatical errors.

Bery good but you really need a proof reader. I know it is not a university but it makes for more enjoyment when s story is written down correctly.

Great story. You’ve left a lot of openings for future chapters.

Get the parents involved and get them fucking

I appreciate the feedback regarding proof-reading. It's a very old story from years ago. I've started writing again and written some new chapters recently which i will upload in the next few days. Hopefully grammar should be better. I will see how to find a proofreader here. I'm not sure of the process yet.

Reminded me of story of Steve's family from Reddit

Use this as a guide. Her brothers are hung. She sucked one brother's dick. She sucked both brothers' dicks.

If you want to read the rest of this series in the correct order. Click the authors name above, and it will take you to their profile. Where you will find the entire series. But with the goofed up chapter order. Which mirrors what happens if you mistakenly click "read more of this series" without paying too much attention to the chapter listed as the "Next Part".