All Comments on 'Father-Daughter Love Story Pt. 02'

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cageysea9725 over 1 year ago

So many abused and abandoned commas.

mikeinoregon over 1 year ago

Stilted dialog. “Kat, my love” waaaay over used. When writing a routine story, the little things really matter.

mikeinoregon over 1 year ago

When writing a routine story, little things matter. Stilted dialogue and over repeated phrases.

Anonymousabout 1 year ago

Great sequel to Part 1. Can't wait to read Part 3!

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