All Comments on 'February Sucks - The Bus'

As an Anonymous critic I'm going to say the this was a excellent tag along story to Mr. Anderson's original February Sucks. There were a few missing words but the only issues I had with the story line were with Linda going back to the room Jim had reserved for their night together; talk about a dumb shift from the original even if it did set up the body of your story. Next issue for me was having the hotel paying Jim 4.2 million dollars while Mark's team only coughed up 3 million dollars. If anything Mark should have paid the larger amount with the hotel paying a lesser amount because Jim was clearly not looking at traffic and stepped into the path of the oncoming bus.

As far as you trying to adapt the story for we poor Yanks please keep the changes to a minimum. I enjoy the learning differences in our common language as well as seeing the different points of view of other writers from various nationalities. I do have to wonder about "gravy and fries". Of course I had the same reaction when I was stationed in Germany and learned that it was Pommes Frits with mayo (mayonnaise). If you are ever in Wiesbaden go to Walter's Frutterkrippe on Conrad Adenauer Ring for their delicious Rindswurst mitt Pommes Frites . Still there after 50 years with the same recipe for their Rindswurst and yes, you can request Ketchup or Senf

Clearly writing a story where reconciliation feels justified is the hardest thing to do in LW. Can't blame you for trying.

This could be the best RAAC version yet. Still doesn't mean I liked it. I appreciate her contrition but still don't see that ever being fixed.

Well written story, if you're going the reconciliation route like the original author did and he did a very good job. I know that there is the BTB crowd out there that won't agree with the reconciliation, but she made a spur of the moment stupid decision and it almost caused her to lose everything. I believe her remorse was genuine and a second chance was ok, and the way she handled Marc LaValliere at the end was excellent. Linda was fortunate that Jim didn't kick her to the curb and be done with it all. Well done 5 stars

A good ending

Nothing there to justify keeping someone that destroyed and almost killed you.

Quite something! Don't know if I could be so forgiving? One never knows in a situation like this, how we would react? I have admit, I did like this ending, as much as the original, so there we are! I suppose you could say. I am a fence sitter.

Mixed feelings about your cut on the affair, I believe a slightly more aggressive response was required. Your story telling abilities are without doubt, you will succeed providing you don’t give up.

A worthy take on GA's setup. Of course the cuck and BTB crowds are going to give it grief. They're always there. Maybe they've never been head over heels in love. 5 stars.

Good thing I read last part. 1 star.

I should have listened to you and skipped this RAAC/CUCK story!!!

it looked like you had a clue but then wtf

I normally lean towards BTB and hate RAAC but your characterization was great and made it believable. Second time reading and I liked it even more. Good, unique take.

Bullshit. Why would any man want to be seen in public with a whore, much less stay married to one. Cuckhold bullshit. Worst take on this story yet.

I love a happy ending. 5 stars to writer.

When will one of you actually stand up and defend their marriage. I matter how big a football player is, he shrinks when you kick his fucking knee out. Just once I’d like to see this written where the football star gets shot, killed, beaten, or otherwise prevented from walking away with another Martian slut

I like your version. Good.

My big problem was near the beginning of this author's slant on the "Feb. Sucks" story. Comes when Linda brought Marc back to the hotel room to fuck him there. I'm sure with the mass stupidity that's out there, I doubt any cheating spouse would bring their "other" where they knew the other spouse would be coming to. Then, I could be wrong. Also, after the huge embarrassment/ betrayal/ humiliation Linda caused, & the resulting action resulting in Marc almost losing his life, without a lot of counselling & even then, I don't know Marc could readily forgive her.

Otherwise, I loved the uniqueness of the well written story, but the above continues to downgrade the story (mostly the fucking in the hotel room prior to he accident) both in my mind & the rating. But I still gave this a 4 star rating, but could've been 5. --Bob

Good until the end. The end SUCKED!!!

A more than creditable version of the GA story. Well written, plotted and paced but a spell check wouldn't go amiss so only a 4.

LA

Doing good until the end. The ending truely sucked

I liked your version and I've read many of the others. Although I've gotta say that as far as forgiving, it's kind of farfetched even with the letter and the audio. I think I'd lay some conditions on the wife. And I don't get the fact that you can't say for sure you wouldn't cheat. I'm on my 2nd wife (1st wife cheated on two occasions) and I've never considered cheating and yes I could have.

Common or come on? Keep your ideas and stories to yourself!

A very rare five stars from me. Very nice job!

Yeah, I gave it a 3. Definitely not the best follow up to this story. You really think the horn dog Marc would be out trolling married pussy, after he just settled a lawsuit for the same thing? Never woulda happened.

Hey erotcuck -maybe people take issue, to getting their wedding vows shit on! Most women will test men in their relationship. If they cheat on you, and you accept it, they lose respect for you. Little by little, you become not a partner, but an unwilling Cuck in a FLM. Pull your head, out of swinger Joes ass!

Having reread this story accidently, I was again caught up into this version. Again, I've a hard time accepting that Linda brought Marc back to the hotel to fuck her not thinking Rick would return. That set up his reaction & the bus accident & the rest of the story. Again, somewhat colored the story downward. Another biggie which bothered me more the 2nd reading: Linda saying she couldn't guarantee she wouldn't repeat her performance in leaving him with somebody- another he-man. What?!?!?! Me trying to give my wife a 2nd chance, that might very well be a game stopper.

There's been also some punctuation problems & repetition, including too many usage of the word "just" & "and" when not needed. But these are minor to the above. I'm keeping my 4 stars despite thinking maybe it should be more a 3 star, but I appreciate the novel slant in things. -- Bob

Yes he took her back. But know this. He has already gone down the road to removing her from his life. IF she strays again it will be over in 5 seconds flat.

Why would she go to the hotel room where she knew her husband was likely to go?

Have had a lot of one night stands, no have a lot of one...

I think you mean surely not surly but it IS a funny mistake. It kind of works.

Pretty sure he had his wallet and ID on him when he was hit and the cops would have gone to his home but ok fine.

He's coming to not he's coming too. Unless of course you meant he's coming also.

Then nodded? Shake means no and nod means yes. Not following here.

OK the recurring hit by a bus gag really is funny I don't care who you are.

Pretty impressive family code system. Were they spies in a previous life?

Don't worry that slut...lol. Gotta' love grandma!

"Mom I still love her"? WTF??? Can we all agree this trite, overused, absurd and repetitive bull shit cliche needs to take a years long holiday? Authors, leave it the fuck out unless there is a special plot making it absolutely necessary to the story to use this trite, overused, absurd and repetitive bull shit cliche! Please!

SLAP! Attagirl grandma!

Too bad this wasn't the grandma in "Of All People". That story wouldn't have turned to shit.

Helluva story so far.

Bus gag never gets old.

The scene where grandma told her what happed to her husband is written about as well as anything I've read on here.

A tenth not a tithe. A tithe is ten percent but you have still misused the word.

She was surprised he came to the hotel room? Well, I guess maybe so given she's clearly a dumbass.

He felt sorry for his wife? Seems VERY unlikely.

OK the gorgeous single divorce lawyer is a cliche I can live with.

He still loves her. 🤣 Stop. Just stop it. If he decides to stick it out because of the kids ok, but just STOP with the still loves her crap.

Why is it good for him to talk to her first? Unsupported assertion.

Dee deserves worse than Marc. She's clearly some kind of psychopath.

Well, good speech to Dee.

He felt bad? Fucking cliches. Just stop.

Come on Dee not "Common Dee", although it is another funny mistake that almost works.

And grandma goes soft.

Loss of our trust? Shouldn't that be loss of your trust?

Uterus? Maybe you meant vagina, pussy or some such.

Considering the circumstance, that's a helluva letter. Well done Other.

Why would he believe her when she said he's a better lover than Marc? Saying that is in HER best interests.

OK maybe he CAN believe her on that one after the recorded phone conversation.

He's recovered emotionally enough to joke about it? Oh HELL no! That's a fuckup on the author's part.

Yeah the reconciliation is only a few months too quick. And why is she asking what about us? He already made that obvious.

And then some convoluted logic.

She never gave blow jobs? WTF? Ladies, if you won't give hubby a blow job, half the population is women and more than a few of them would be happy to take care of that for you. As the YouTube comedienne says, "A blow job a day keeps a side bitch away".

Two day? OK he's a badass. Or did you mean two hours?

OK her insistence on the post-nup is kind of impressive.

LOL Awesome attack scene on Marc.

Overall, one of the very best follow ups given the reconciliation.

Not a chance, none. Get her 100% out of your life.

Absolutely awful. Gravy on French Fries? Yuck. Terrible. The worst image ever recorded anywhere in literature. Despicable. Depraved, Dishonorable.

Now the rest of the story was excellent. I loved it. But the wonderful quality of the piece (minus a few typos) cannot make up for the horrible essence of the very wicked picture of that disgusting notion. Gravy on fries. The worst pornography ever created.

To make it worse, I was trying to rate it minus five. I must have entered a wrong command because it came out a plus five. It was then that the thought exploded on my consciousness: what if it was a motif? What if it was a sort of symbol for the degrading, sexually perverse rutting between Marc and Linda?

Viewed in that light, it becomes a great literary symbol that raises the creation of the story to new heights. IT IS A FIVE AFTER ALL.

And it reaffirms the other fundamental principle of life: All's well that ends well.

The wife cheats on the guy in front of their friends and all it takes is her ridiculous letter to forgive her? In what world does this happen?

One of the better February Sux stories I have read. One thing I liked was the comment about "for better or worse" and it couldn't get any worse. Not that there are many who would consider this. One and Done seems to be almost the default reaction to breaking

"forsaking all others."

A very thought provoking story.

Thank you for sharing your creative efforts.

Of all the alternative endings to this story, this ending stands out for exploring the pain of the reconciliation without having to trash what was a pretty good marriage. Thank you.

Ed

the Viking sailor, I read your comment about gravy on french fries. I will admit Gravy is second choice, Wendy's Chili is the best. A good gravy is a close second. Don't go to Denver CO, they bring you mustard. UCK! Ketchup goes on top of meatloaf during the last 15 min of baking, nothing else.

I agree with the rest of your comment 5*

dude got his brains scrambled by that bus. very sad.

NFW

NO FUCKING WAY

ABOUT TWO ENORMOUS ASSHOLES, WRITTEN BY ONE

Hmm no. Just no.

You can't fix damage that bad. You cant.

And why stay with someone that cares that little about you?

So ending made no sense. He was not written as a wimp. He would have to be seriously low on testosterone to take her back.

Good ending BUT your rationalisation about better with than not I can not live with MY EX SHE cheated on me with my best friend and still 40 years later i would NEVER take her back Sorry (jaybee186)

Garbage. Another willing cuck. Such a simpleton Mc that a few insincere words from wifey and he feels ten feet tall? Plus , he is willing to maintain friendship with all the other assholes that assisted wifey and defended her? Over the top, his humiliation was extreme, that just does not work here. It is also obvious the author has ever had broken bones. After weeks in multiple cast,there is no way that very weekend he puts on a sex in bed show as described. Just nor happening, and it would take a long time to just walk without stiffness, let alone perform more bedroom gymnastics.

So, in the end, it is again the man that needs to adjust, the man that needs to suck it up, and wifey just says sorry, and all is well. Shit.

REMORSE are words that people use after they get caught doing something they know they shouldn't have done in the first place. The murderer apologizes to the family of his victim or the wife who apologizes to her husband for betraying his trust. It's all the same. Empty words!

This is one of the best versions of this story and I have read a pile of them. The versions with Linda clinging to her, Jim will be hurt but he needs to get over it, crap, is simply too far outside of reality for me.

I'm not a fan of reconciliation unless the guilty party completely owns what they have done and a reasonable explanation as to how it's to the benefit of the injured party. I found this story to have a reasonable level of both to make it plausible.

A well written version and an enjoyable read.

I don't know that I would have been as forgiving as your Jim. In fact I know I wouldn't have been.

My one question, though, is why she would take Marc back to the hotel? Surely she'd know it would be the first place her husband would go once he realised he'd been cuckolded; even if it was only to grab his gear before heading home. Which is exactly what he did.

What would have happened if he'd walked in on them? Now that would have been interesting.

Jeez, the original story is such a mind fuck. I have enjoyed the original of course and many of the different versions. The story is like a moving puzzle. What would you do? What's the right thing to do? What's the wrong thing to do?

The truth is that there isn't a right or wrong thing to do because everyone is different.

If It was 20 years ago I would say the chance of this actually happening would be like 1 in hundred million but with all woksters and cancel culture weirdos we have in this country these days I would change it to 1 in hundred thousand. Times change but I look at it like this, just because things can change doesn't mean they should or that the change is even good....

Good story 4⭐

hmmm, not the best story from this author, but then again, he was building on a train wreck anyway. I get the draw that LW authors feel the need to do their own FS version. And in staying true to the characters and reconciliation that GA had in his original, I think this is the best of the ones I had done.

I get the feeling reading JO's other works here, if it was his story he would have burned Linda, and Jim would have picked up a new love. But he kept them together as GA did. In trying to hold true to the original outcome JO did really, really well.

BTW - using the bus as a way to cut Jim out of the picture and then have Ruth come in. That was really well thought out.

JO your original stories are certainly your strength, keep pushing them out and ignore trolls who insult you. They are obvious need therapy.

All that flowery rhetoric before the story, and all this became was as pathetic as the original. A weak willed, easily manipulated husband, and a betraying slutwife who did no penance, atonement or the "making it up". Odds are she'll do it again because she got away with it without any penalty.

You wasted your time on this sorry assed remake.

And they lived happily ever after, until she did it again.

Meh, one of the better FS versions. I am over the FS storyline, but I hate that I can't stop reading them when someone posts a new one...

Simply for the story telling, you draw readers in and want them to finish the story first, so for that it's 5*.

For the plot as a whole it's 1*, I'm still waiting for the story that he burns everyone. Friends, marc, linda, the hotel etc, this story isn't suppose to be a RAAC. This story to me is the single most disrespected plot a man can have done to him.

The thing is, she didn't feel regret the morning after, she had shower sex after the night, she went to breakfast with him lol like come on lol ffs, she even laughed at his comment about the guy getting hit by a bus. she went home thinking it will be all ok.

the only time she got regret was when things weren't going by what she was thinking would happen after her night and morning with marc. these stories all follow the same plot of when it's all fun and games, no one feels guilty because why should they, there having fun!! but when it's over and life is still going on, the consequences come into effect and that's when reality hits and then it's all begging and regretting the night.

Please make a story where when you see this kind of plot, that in that 1 moment, Jim couldn't go back to her, she needed to be divorced, kids stayed with him and life continued. Love is powerful, but Lust is equal. That is what this story is about, lust over love and lust stomped on love so hard.

Resmihardin

Not the best version of this classic but far from the worst. Reminds one that fiction is just that. No spouse would do something like this so openly on a whim unless the marriage was already seriously broken or she had mental problems. And a reconciliation in the first instance would be very unlikely except for the minorr children and one would imagine its continuance to be a loveless marriage. For the latter instance, one would think a separation and her seeing a psychiatrist would be in order before a reconciliation. The only types to just upfront forgive and forget are the religious loonies. There are more often loveless marriages for the sake of kids. This story is a literotica classic but more complexity of relations would make it better for me.

Great after reading this story I became RETARDED. thanks by the way.

I have enjoyed this author's stories immensely and found that I wanted to reach through the keyboard and slap some sense into him. The whole story flowed good until page 4 and the author went stupid. It was like watching a running back pick up a fumble in their own end zone, dodge everything with grace and skill all the way down the field almost to the other end zone only to watch him fall flat on his face. You freaking had it and shat it away. Linda's disrespect for Jim was unforgivable. She wrote the letter stating that she was giving him everything in the divorce. Give it to the attorney! Have her ass served. Finish out the divorce, take her rings. He doesn't have to kick her out of the house, he can keep her on as his personal slut because that is what she it. He can let her cohabitate with him and the kids, but not as his wife. Problem solved!

I read the original one, I even read the different views of different writers but this one particularly seems to be the best. I congratulate you and thank you for making my time worth reading the story more and more.

Nope. He needs to balance the books as it were. It’s interesting how she talked him out of that option quickly.

ZEROZEROZERO. THE WORST, WORST SPELLING, WORST LOGIC, WORST CUCK, WORST SLUT, WORST FRIENDS, AND WORST MOM, AND ....THAT I QUIT HALFWAY THROUGH.

This storyline is a genre all its own. The original is still the best though. The author here makes a good effort though. My favored adaptations are neither btb or reconciliation. Such blatant infidelity as this would have to be a studied one, and no self-respecting spouse would stay with such a partner. Such thoughtless impetuosity would have shown up in a marriage beforehand, especially with kids. So I find the premise a bit incredulous. More back story could cure this, like a history of adultery. Otherwise too farfetched.

There is no escaping the fact that the Linda in the original story did a simply horrible thing.

No story, by any of the many writers, including this one, that have tried their own "take" on the story has every succeeded at making Linda's actions any less horrible ... and no one ever will succeed at that, no matter which different "way" they try to re-tell it.

The simple fact is that the original act is irredeemable, and no way that any write ever re-imagines it's aftermath, whether repeat, burn, reconciliation, WHATEVER, will ever change that! This is a horrible story, and it will forever STAY a horrible story!

1 star - You have got to be joking - I can't fathom why you chose to write this crap, it is even worse than the original.

There is no way in hell that a RAAC is even a possibility with this story - death is much more likely. The ASSHOLE Mark is a sexual predator and those kinds of people usually end up dead at a very young age. Either direct intervention by an enraged husband or STD - the ASSHOLE is a walking dead man.

At the very least, ONCE&DONE is the only sane and reasonable outcome for this woman. She could have been exposed to any number of STD/AIDES type of diseases - because there is no telling who the ASSHOLE was with prior to her stupidity. She should be facing 6 months in quarantine and no physical contact with her husband or kids, until she is declared disease free by a medical lab.

Some words from nixrox:

"not necessary for this kind of website - everything you type on the net stays on the net forever."

Interesting thought. Directions from Literotica

"The best way to support the authors on this site is to let them know what you think of their work, or just tell them hello and let them know you are a reader. Using this form you can instantly send feedback to the author listed above. When you hit the "submit" button, the message will appear in the author's in box. If you want a response, please fill in the "return address" field.

Personally, having just read the amazing story by the author, I would live in total embarrassment for the rest of my life if I had written what the person reading the story at the same time I did, wrote in the previous comment.

The Hoary Cleric

Finally an author that brings a concept of true love and understanding to a classic "heart rending" story of betrayal.

Once something terrible has happened, the question is about the future. The author wrote honestly about something he fully understood and knew the continued heartache, but gives a choice - what is the best future.

I prefer his.

Thanks

The Hoary Cleric

P.S. I have counselled several situations that were equally as bad. Each had it own final outcome: some good, some terrible.

As a counsellor my rule is no physical contact with a counselee. (My personality sort of demands that.)

The one exception was a man who had worked over seas to save his family from financial disaster, only to come home to a cheating wife. I hugged him and held him as he cried his heart out.

You know, it seems you writers like to stroke each other off. Like there's some exclusive club for unplublished Peabody award wannabes.

George Anderson's initial story is one of the lowest rated versions. Why is that? Probably because too many self respecting males would never tolerate that scenario and the conclusion. In your diatribe before your version, you state that Jim & Linda love each other. Really? Someone who willfully deceives, betrays, embarrasses and emasculates their spouse "loves them"? What fuckin' planet are you from? Sure you could be like George Anderson, Reed Richards, Denham Forrest and their ilk who get a thrill out of being humiliatied and emasculated. But self respecting men could never put up with bullshit like this.

I liked the idea that Marc and Linda used the hotel room, and that Jim may not have see, but heard his wife’s betrayal. I also liked that he staggered out of the hotel, and got hit by the hotel’s shuttle bus. I think both of these deepen the betrayal.

What I didn’t like was the change of Marc turning into a muscle bound ape. In my mind, George Anderson wanted Marc to be this ultimate lover, completely skilled in every aspect of sexual activity. He had have countless lovers, and was now skilled in reading and reacting to any woman’s buttons of intimacy. It should be obvious that Jim could never reach this level of skill without the experience that several hundred lovers which Marc had gone through.

As for Jim, I think George Anderson basically stated that Jim was a one-and-done guy, and this should have been also kept intact. I never saw it in this story. It was gotten around by time in a hospital bed, and converting Marc into a less than desirable lover.

In the end, I think of this story as an irresistible force verses an unmovable object. George resolved this by reversing the situation between Jim and Linda, which I think was a good way to get to RAAC. The only other way that I see this is Linda has to spend several months or years waiting for Jim to get his experience base up to a level that matches Marc, all the while staying true to her husband. I have never seen this as a resolution of the February Sucks story, but it could work.

I’ve read a lot of the variations of this story, and the more I read the more I come to realise that there is no comeback from Linda’s betrayal. None. One and done.

I’ve read most of the rewrites of the original and I think this is one of the better ones. I picked up on a few “Aussie”terms but it didn’t hurt the story one bit. I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work.

Generally well written with a clear, well flowed plot. His mother (the saint) is an interesting vehicle for plot development - well done, Mr. Other. Linda using the Maddison room for her dalliance is also clever. Now the negatives:

- IMO Linda's treachery in abandoning her hubby, then lying and conspiring to "escape" to enjoy a hiatus from her marital responsibilities are unforgivable. Author makes a strong case for RAAC, but IMO not enough. This did not influence my 4 stars.

- The errors in grammar and punctuation are jarring distractions. You hit two of my favorite complaints (your versus you're) (past tense laid used instead of lay). "Very good but way less than perfect" cost a star. I advise using a proofreader.

- Multi-million $$ awards are not as common as LW authors would have us believe. I recommend using a far more less detailed amount like "generous award that easily covered future college expenses/retirement/etc."

Overall, a great read. Thanks.

Keep 'em comin'.

Like they say Alls well that ends well. Well Done 5 stars

Well written, but NO WAY Linda takes Mark back to her room at the hotel. It is going to have Jim and Linda's stuff spread all over, and that will be very hard to ignore.

Well written version of the now classic. But the last part was too labored to keep the reconciliation premise. The betrayal is way over the top to be realistically reconciled even with a supportive grandparent and remorseful wife. Trust could never be realistically restored without understanding why or even more so if he had to accept the obvious venality. Grandmama is easier to understand because of subordinating his interests to the grandkids. A reasonable observer could not see a real reconciliation with intimacy withouit an acceptable explanation (drugs, alcohol, psychosis). Nah... Divorce, custody, grandma as stand-in, until someone new came along one could trust. That would have been a better ending, with the ex-wife learning a lesson from consequences before regaining herself. Even some "cheaters" learn and move on. Have seen this in real life with someone who went through it. An old friend who is now my wife. She was young, dumb, and stoned for her Mark Lavallier at 24. She told me about it when we became serious. The author should rewrite this story. He /she is a good enough writer to do it better.

Another”and they lived happily ever after” story that just does not get past the level of ridiculous. No way that level of betrayal and resulting mental and physical damage is going to swept under the rug with an “Oh well”.

I love your take on this story 10 stars

i was great

Carolynne

My favorite version of February Sucks has in it Jim's explanation of why what she did hurt him so much.

He told her basically that she wasn't drunk, she wasn't lonely, she didn't fall in love with another man, she ran off and had sex with another man, and it was just one night. She blew off her husband, who had loved her well and loyally do years, for just one night. That was the disrespect that hurt so much.

Nah.... I'd have divorced her ass. If a spouse did something this public and humiIating, then there is something longstanding wrong in the marriage or mental issue with the wife. I cannot imagine how something like this could be fixed as the price of that would be higher than the wife or husband could stand to keep their self-respect. Better to go your own way and be responsible where children are concerned. That marriage was probably not meant to last, because her actions we're not a "mistake" but an expression of a serious underlying issue. This mistake was putting years into a marriage that was based on mistaken premises.

I could noy trust Linda to go to the Store without calling Marc . I would have Divorced her Cheating ass . Maybe she can reach the kids that it is alright to cheat . Mother of the year for sure

While I really heavily favor the scorched earth versions, this is the best of the reconciliation ones because of one thing... She very quickly regrets and is visibly sickened by her own actions. Them getting back together was a tad rushed maybe but at least she knew she was wrong from the get go. The ones where they stay together after weeks or months of her rubbing it in his face and telling him to grow up are just disgusting.

Hit by a bus? at like 10PM at night? right outside the hotel? Why was the bus there? why was it going apparently fast enough to almost kill a guy by the front entrance?

anyway nothing new here. people talking in ways people don't talk. the wife screaming nooooooo like shes fucking Darth Vader. By the time hes good to go home hes already forgiven her, because Marc didn't fuck better than him I suppose. he enjoyed reading that for some reason. reading people say its a good RAAC is laughable. He had already forgiven her by the time he read her letter. it's sad. It's hard to earn a RAAC in these types of stories when its just a normal cheating spouse but the humiliation level of doing it on their special night, openly, in front of their closest friends, taking her lover to the room he paid for, almost fucking dying because of it. and hes over it by the time he's out of the hospital... it's not earned. a couple weeks of moping around and quit being friends with Dee whoopde frickin do.

It was MUCH better than the much praised but truly poorly told 'original' G.A. certainly wrote a much copied story but I suggest it wasn't so much copied as attempts to fix what was a dreadful derge of a tale told by a questionable 'author' I gave the original a poor rating but this rewrite deserved a better rating. I would have liked to see something truly painful happen to both 'Linda' and 'Marc'

Thank You.

One of bad sequels.

Know it's not real But.

She cheated And did not regret that much then overboard with regret.

Cheaters sex went from fantastic to?

She totally disrespected him not even thinking about him and kids. How many dances?! And then!!

He is W-I-M-P as most writers have him

Most Men would have broken up First dance if allowed them to make it to dance floor. If slut objected leave her and star planning for divorce

Yet another February story. As interesting it is, but this concept leaves only one option, divorce. Maybe if it were some typical descreet fling, then yeah, maybe the raac option is on the table. But such level of disrespect and humiliation? No. Better yet, hell no. Yeah, she is full of regrets and remorse, but its always easy to do post-judging, so no, all Linda can get with her penance, is some level of civility during the process and further interactions about kids, nothing more. But I have to say, "not fighting the divorce and accepting any terms" is quite good attempt on her part, and would held strong case in favor of reconciliation in many other cheating cases, but sadly for her, not in this one.

Horrible just plain horrible.

Also a fine ending. Thanx

Now I will read the BTB version

Well written but nothing justified taking her back.

And they lived happily ever after. Until she did it again.

A fantastic story.... right up until the raac moment.

I think a few people are reading through the FS versions again as in not just the comments, but I have gotten a few emails that have been having a bit of a go at this version. Just to rearticulate, in writing this I was trying to stay true to GA's original outcome, which was reconciliation. In writing this version I was hoping to create a series of events, such as Jim being hit of the bus or Ruth being there in Linda's face, that would have made Linda have true remorse for her actions.

In one way, the crawling across broken glass comment is an attempt to show how serious Linda was. Even in this tale, I would not imagine that Jim and Linda would have had a perfect life. I think Jim would have had lots of anger for years and Linda plenty of guilt. But GA wrote them ending up together, I wanted to try follow that. As the only true reconciliation story, I have done. I find the comments interesting.

I think I might try to write another reconciliation or forgiveness story from scratch later this year, just to see if there are circumstances different to Jim and Linda's tale where it might be more believable.

However, keep an eye out for my upcoming story "Abandoned Rage", it has some similarities to this, but goes in a very different way ;)

Cheers

John Other

Excellent, I may actually like your version a bit more. Just seemed more realistic to me. Well done.

3 stars, did like that lavaliere got punished by the team admin fior his actions, now if they would stop overpaying these immature overblown kids for playing a game, that would help as would not looking the other way, abetting and protecting these arrogant simpletons as they philander, abuse their wives and commit other crimes both felonious and misdemeanor. rk

Unrealistic and pretty stupid towards the end

No, George Anderson's story was not 'excellent' or anything remotely fitting for such a description. This isn't, either.

I liked this FbSx story. While I did not like the reconciliation story that GA's story was, yours seemed more plausible. The fact that the emotional damage, as stated at the end of your story, continued years afterwards gives it some realism. One, IMHO, weakness that this story has, comes at the end. Because of Linda injuring Marc's hand, thus ending his career, I would suspect that he would sue them for damages. Especially as he had to payout 3 million, for Jim's accident, that he did not have, directly, anything to do with. Just my POV. Thank-you

-

Pasqual

You definitely did a much better job of making reconciliation plausible whereas GeorgeAnderson didn't even come close. I do have to take you to task for calling the original "excellent" instead of pathetic drivel though...

Just another stupid cuck story and a whoring wife

Jim is a stupid cuck for taking the slut back.

Well done. My thanks to SaddleTramp1956 for putting his spin on your story because it brought me to your other works. Well done.

Almost a believable reconciliation. Good story

Bad story. Why get back with the wife after she treated him like that. She is hurting he had his heart torn out but in the hospital because she cant keep her lega closed. Make matters worse they are having another kid. You can reconcile without getting back together.

The husband deserves a better wife and partner then a selfish whore who treated him like dirt

I really like this. There are a few things that I would change (yeah, yeah, everyone has an opinion), but your version of GA's tale really resonated with me, almost as much as the original. And I appreciate that you kept it a reconciliation/redemption story. Outstanding.

Wife is a fucking pig.

Waiting for a warm body to grow cold, in order to PISS all over the cunt.

Reconciliation for cheating is one thing. This level of disrespect and betrayal ... I don't see how one could come back from that and your version still doesn't cover it. The G.A. story is so powerful because of the intense betrayal and disrespect. And you compounded it by having her go back to their hotel room with Marc.

Then the silliness of never having given a blowjob before and never swallowing. Seriously? with Marc? And I thought Marc was the fantasy that she dreamed it would be. At the end there was the denial that he wasn't really that good.

She talks about all her orgasms and how great the sex was untill confrontation!!!

Then she still takes Marc's side.

Slut

Had to quit. Only repentance when caught. As said even laughing at bus victim. Piece of shit

It's funny how the anti-cuck brigade predictably started in with their BTB mentality. One wonders if a woman wronged them in the past or if they ever got laid in the first place. If they have a woman in their life it's probably a mousy woman who cowers in fear of being hit.

I think I like your take on Anderson's story best. The only thing that detracted from it was the common grammar and spelling mistakes. Install Grammerly ASAP! Also, it's "C'mon!" not "Common." And "too" means "also" whereas "To" is a preposition used to indicate direction or movement as in "He took the car to the store."

If you ever need a copy editor in the future, look me up. I'd be happy to help.

Otherwise, good job!