All Comments on 'Finding Our What My Wife Wants'

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"What happens if I don't agree?" "I move out and move in with Mary and Bill." "Well cheating skank slut, don't let the door hit you in. your STD filled ass. You have 5 minutes to get your shit and get out. If you aren't gone I call six friends and we gang bang you all night. Then I drive to Tijuana and sell you to a whore house. Now get the fuck out bitch, the clock is ticking." She started to cry so he just slapped her face hard to bring her back to her new reality. "Now cunt, get moving!" She was gone in five minutes. As it turned out Mary and Bill didn't want her either. The next day he beat the shit out of Bill then took both Mary and his whore wife to Mexico as promised. Got about 10K for both of them. Not bad for two useless, empty headed pieces of trash.

Very disjointed presentation. No flow, abrupt, jerky.

what the hell was THAT ? tell the bitch to leave and she will be served on Monday. Kick Bills ass out the door after the punch and charge him with trespassing and assault

You’ll leave me if I don’t submit to theee other people and become their slave?

Well. Don’t let the door hit you where the good Lord split you. Did you want to take your things with you now or would you like me to pack them for you?

WTF if my wife ever come to me saying shit like that to me. I'd go strap on my glock, and grab my baseball bat. Telling my wife to set in the chair by the front door, and shut the fuck up bitch. As soon as MARY AND BILL came to the door I'd shove the end of the bat into both their Stomachs knocking the air out of the both of them. Then I'd drag them both in and put them on the Couch, and start Interrogating them. Which one of you two filled my wife's head with this bullshit of yours? And every time they started to get Snarky with me, I'd hit them one time on the side of their leg with the bat, after a couple good hit I got the whole story out of them both about this slave and master thing. OK both of you stupid asses listen up very closely as your life depends on it. First thing, if you go to fuck with a man's wife, or marriage, you had better come armed! Second thing, she tells me she going to go live with you, if I wouldn't Accept her, and your demands. That Ain't happening, unless your all buried next to each other, you understand? Third and last thing, you will be moving out of town in 48 hours, and if I think that you talked to my wife ever again, I'll hunt you down and kill you both. Any questions? none OK, it's 5 pm now you got 48 hours before I come looking for you. Now get the fuck out of my sight. OK now for you my sweet and Misguided loving wife do you have any questions? none ok. But from now on you will stay naked at all times in the house. And I will give you clothes, when we leave the house. Now come over here, and give me a blow job. You thought because I was soft and loving, that you could make a slave, and cuckold out of me, did you? You stupid bitch, I've killed people for less in my lift time, three more would have even cost me any less sleep..

Bad flow. Disjointed. This is more an outline than a vignette.

Horrible characters, all around.

If a wife has to ambush her husband with this kind of bullshit, to try and improve their marriage, the marriage is a wreck already.

Overall, writing, story… very flushable.