All Comments on 'First Time'

I am so sorry. I couildn't get into your story because of the cemetary scene. That kind of creeped me out. I did think that your writing style was pretty good though. Had you picked a starlit beach or anything other than a cemetery, I probably would have love it.

Your command of language is Classic, rose! The images vivid, & the action intense, too. It was just not really satisfying to me, because of the lack of length, honestly. He penetrates her, and its done: bah. After all of the imagery setting UP the tryst, I expected there to be a more fulfilling love-making session, U see. Your ability to create an atmosphere are unparalelled! You have talent that rivals Stephen King in THAT arena. It is 2 bad that the setting domin8d your anecdote, though. There was a cemetary, it was raining. 'nuff said. Heh More SEX, please rose!

Very good story short and sweet but very erotic