All Comments on 'Flirting'

Hi, Jack,

Congrats on your first story. A few suggestions:

Use dialogue to tell part of the story instead of you telling the story. "I'd love some milk" is dialogue and even suggestive dialogue but it falls flat when there's no follow-up. Lack of dialogue in the rest of the story made it rather dry, too.

Submit in the right category. An older man trying to seduce a young flight concierge/stewardess (or was it the other way around? Without dialogue to get Kelly's thoughts expressed, it's hard to tell) it might have gone in mature, erotic couplings, or maybe another category or two, but romance doesn't feel right.

Sorry, but between these two issues, I can't rate above 3 stars.

Whore at heart, won't be long before she blows up a bunch of lives.

Loved it! Thank you for sharing.

I’m a flight attendant. Please write more. Great beginnings

Sign me,

Pagirl2play2.... I’m on kik under this name 5 stars bc I want more