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AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Bump

Intense erotic writing. I enjoyed it, but wish it was longer. A bad character, but wickedly so in a erotica fantasy. I hope there is more and look forward to Job's learning how to use his powers as he grows into supreme sexual power.

soxfan406soxfan406over 5 years ago
Keep going

I really like where its going. One note is that when you introduce new female characters it is pretty important to describe their appearance as much as possible, and their hair color is sort of the bear minimum. That being said, write more please.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
Nooooo, don’t stop now

What a great story line.

You really need to take the story further

RedPandaSevenRedPandaSevenalmost 4 years ago

A great start to a story that just seems abandoned to be left unfinished

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

Too good to stop now. More please

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Please continue this story it has great potencial

AnonymousAnonymousabout 1 month ago

Please continue

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I write about antiheroes and villains. My stories are not about good guy beats bad guy. Even when the protagonist wins, I can promise you that they won't be self evidently good.

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