All Comments on 'Forbidden Fruit Ch. 01'

You've done such a good job portraying the hum-drum, mother-in-law-infested live we somehow inevitably end up with and then conjuring up this exciting, forbidden, passionate interlude. I really liked the way you described Leona's feeling of deja vu remembering back to her exhilarating times in school. And the way you make us remember that life has rich chocolate to offer as well as everyday vanilla, in the reading and writing of fiction if nowhere else.

Very good, but she definitely needs to go back for more, perhaps daily on her journey home.

Please make a continuation where they fuck all over the house. Dining table right before family dinner. Have Theo cum directly into cooking pots and everything.