All Comments on 'Forbidden Lust'

Hate to see her toss her marriage away for a fantsay, but on lit. who knows. Look for the rest.

Very well written, not like some of the b/s that's on here

please keep with the theme, you got my attention!

Aww, thanks! :::blush::: This story is kind of based on something going on right now. More to come (heh), I hope! Thanks - direction and constructive criticism or requests are always welcome.

your first line rocked as a hook line. One piece of constructive criticism. Keep your paragraphs a little shorter. Reading from the computer isn't like reading a book, shorter paragraphs are easier to read and keep the reader from straining to enjoy your story. Good luck with your writing!

Short, and sweet.

You captured that feeling of lust that sometimes just takes a person over. From that point on, every interaction with the object of desire is merely foreplay . . . which means, of course, that the sexual adventure that is sure to come, will be amazingly hot. I can't wait to see what you have in store for us.

You have completely and totally nailed this! Thanks for writing.

Very well written with appropriate feminine thought processes, reaction, actions.

and compelling story

It's always horrible before, wishing and wanting, but afterwards isn't all that great either. It's that way whether it happened or not or if it went well or not.

Amazing that it doesn't seem to go away.