All Comments on 'Forced Sex Slave Ch. 01'

It was written by an illiterate. I could not finish it because it was that bad. Close is not clothing.

I thought for sure he was down but then he thrusted back in. Down is not done

Are you immature child trying to write about something you know nothing about? Disgusting effort............

Good effort. Edit your mistakes and ignore the nasties. If it were up to them we'd have no Literotica because they would chase off all the writers with their unreasonable unconstructive comments. Give us more stories.

People really should refrain from personally insulting writers. Calling names is uncalled for. It discourages people from submitting works. It was free and you can't even be cordial in your critique shows the lack of a maturity not the person who submitted this story. Thanks for the story Jessica.

I like this foundation. It could have been longer. A great start, middle but an abrubt ending. Not bad jessica

I truly appreciate all people who post their stories here, no matter if new or already well into writing erotic stuff. But if you are not a native speaker, or not sure if grammar or spelling is correct: GET AN EDITOR!!

Such a shame that readers are sometimes so unnecessarily unpleasant to authors, particularly new ones. The story has errors and could be improved, but that’s what life is about, and there was enough here to build a good foundation for a story and for you as an author. If you can find an editor who will work with you on improving your writing, then do so. If not, then keep writing, proof read (preferably out loud), use Word or Google Docs to catch some errors, and most importantly think about readability and flow. Thanks

It's not *amazing*, but you've obviously got potential. Keep working at it.