All Comments on 'Forget Me Not Ch. 10'
by dreamin101
- 11 Comments
Anonymousalmost 9 years agoDon't keep us waiting for too long! This is really too much of a tease.
Anonymousalmost 9 years agoThis story is so intense. If only I had a Dalton in my life. So jealous of Laura.
TrippyLuvalmost 9 years agoLaura seems to think he left her twelve years ago and without warning. Did someone come in between them? How long before we find out? The suspense is killing me!
Anonymousalmost 9 years agoI can't figure it out, is he gonna let her return back to her life, that means he got his revenge ( god knows what for, I might add) but these last couple days weren't really a way of getting back at her if anything she enjoyed pretty much the entire time. Or is he gonna sell her into some slavery thing which opens up into a whole other thing. I just can't seem to work this out.
Why does he want revenge and what is he gonna do to her?, I need to know!fast!!
Anonymousalmost 9 years agoYour grammar begins to falter in the third sentence of this story.
Why do most of these stories start with them waking and ending with them sleeping despite only having a few minutes of sex?
Start getting to the point of the story and use a spelling/grammar checker.
Anonymousalmost 9 years ago"Why do most of these stories start with them waking and ending with them sleeping despite only having a few minutes of sex?"
Findmywayalmost 9 years agoI have enjoyed the story from the beginning but I too have struggled with the lack of background information from both Laura and Dalton's perspective. I've asked the same question in previous chapters. Dalton is out for revenge while it is clear Laura was in love with him and he broke her heart.
Why is he afraid to talk with her? I've struggled with why after so many days he won't allow her to speak or at least give her small clues as to why her is out for revenge. I think the background information even if in their own chapters of their perception of what happened could go along way in solidifying the story and make it more compelling.
Just my two cents.
BettyDaBombalmost 9 years agoThe chapters are starting to drag on (even as short as they are!) and going nowhere. They wake up, have sex, eat, have sex, go to sleep.
