All Comments on 'Fortune and Fortitude Pt. 05'

We’ll done, keep up the good work!

I think it would be a no brainer not to have Quinn carrying twins. Does Quinn have any special powers as her brother? How do you bring Zoe in to the mix because she is zealous of Quinn?

Starting out as a pretty great story. Hope the 20 is reached pretty quickly.

I like the slow build that you have going with this. Looking forward to seeing with Jara does and becomes along with the others as he gathers them

Brilliant! Id love to see an orgy with all vassels at some stage but only after spending quality time with Quin. Maybe even at her insistence?

I am thoroughly enjoying this story and I really hope you keep going. I would like to see Nasha as a vassal. Keep up the awesome stories.

Awesome story. I can hardly wait for 20 comments. Nasha definitely needs to become a vassal.

It's interesting to see Jared fight against who he is because of his religious affiliation. Nature or nurture, which is stronger?

20th comment, at least!

Great start i enjoy the mechanics of how power systems works, this looks intreasting

Really enjoy the direction you are taking the characters!!

fun!

Love it! Definitely want more.

Ballsy move, Jared. Let's see what Ms Senguine makes of it.

I enjoyed this story and I can see that Jared is taking the first steps toward finding the balance between his values and his needs as a dragon.

Great writing! More!

Great story. I like seeing Jared’s growth. I a curious about who the female contact is that Jared called in the last chapter.

To reiterate, wrong catagory --- this is Sci-Fi & Fantasy why can't authors figure this out....... by definition you can choose no other catagory and be true to the right classification.

Wow...the ending was a good twist.

Thanks for writing, this is a fun piece.

Senguine would fit the category, but that feels a ways down the road, maybe as a means for her to recover. Working in Nasha would be interesting, for someone who’s not already smitten and doesn’t owe him a life-debt.

Nice work. It’s keeping me very entertained. Keep up the good writing. Look forward to the next chapter.

I like that Jared is just winging it. I would love to see him gain more strength and still keep his “ humanity”.

Not Bad, (aussie way of saying good). keep going

Great job! Love it. This is comment 24. Start the next chapter 😇

Keep it going!

Interesting story. Please continue with it..

Great addition. Less Quinn and more Harem. Really like the inner voice dialogue of flame/Jared

Please consider placement to the correct catagory....... Sci-Fi & Fantasy

Thanks very much for your time imagination and effort good story hope to see it continue on

Yeah I need to see more of a balance of his merciful and merciless sides. It too much on his mercy/bible zealot side. Followed by sudden draconic emotions quickly quenched to near total bible thumping.

You’ll work for comments? Blah.

Less Bible thumping more humping!

I think your writing is excellent - good detail / situational description …. Plz keep writing for as long as possible

This is a fantastic story! Please keep writing as you like. Don’t worry about what others think. You’ve got a knack, keep going, I can’t wait to read more of your stories.

This is a great story and I am really looking forward to see where this story is going. The sex could use more detailed imagery like "as she came under the grip of her orgasam a bright red flush filled her face, neck and shoulders..." More detail and gore in the combat as well as in "...the smell of crispy seared pork filled the air as my buring fist smashed through its hide, the hole almost hidden by the gouts of blood jetting out..."

More threesomes with girls playing with each other and assisting orgasms like Kiara did (but being even more active/proactive)...very hot.

This story is great so far but I don't like Jared because he's a bible thumper (religion is a tool used to control people and gain power over them IMO), stupid and a wuss. He has such a weak, ass licking, goody two shoes personality.

Strange and twisted but i love it! Need more.

Liked the fight choreography! Can't wait to read more!

I want to see him with Senguine and Quinn.

@lerena , I don't know if you would read my comment or not, first off I want to see Jared with Senguine and any of girls (except Quinn and Nasha don't like them at all) , or new one hopefully another MILF.

Anyway, IMO I must say that the plot/sex so far so so good, I'd read some Haremlit , one of them seems similar to your story, I usually haven't finished any of them, because the lack of sex or messy sex or so much world-building, or the typical mc character (OP , cocky..etc), but IMO this one -so far- is different, the good balance between world-building, and relationships-building is very good, furthermore you don't rush the sex scene when it comes, they are hot, creative, detailed. hope you continue that way.

one more thing it may looks minor but it's major for me, the story not 1st POV , therefore there isn't so much that annoyed filler of the MC self dialogue, so thanks again.

Hm now this was a great read. I rather enjoyed the improvised love scene w/Kiara and then the battle. I would love to see Jared tap into his fire more.. or somehow come to a point where he's able to partner w/it to the benefit of himself & his harem/vassals.