All Comments on 'Four Weeks' Vacation on The Farm'

Promising start! Can't wait to read that happening. A little quibble, Does it have to read like a film script? Put dialog in quotes and describe the setting?

When we get to the training, I want to feel her inner state, arousal, anticipation, fear...

Love pony play, tho, so pls keep going, Mahadosa! Cheers~ P_M

You are right about that film script format. This was an experiment, and the dialog form is definitely sub-optimal. I won't use that anymore. The good news is that Jill will test the venue, I'll post the follow up next week.

How Many chapters this story Will hace?

Great story, I love pony girl stories and hope this is just the first chapter

There is just one follow up, about Jill's intake. Will publish that next week. While I do love pony girl stories, I seem to be better at other submission topics.

Super story