Thanks for a nice piece of erotica. Well written (apart from drifting between part and present tenses), avoiding unnecessary details and complications. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Don't be creepy. (FYI... saying Mmmm after some innocuous comment is creepy) Overly sexual names.. just don't. If the fact that you think you're "hung" is how you're going to identify yourself, don't get upset when I judge you for it Also, overly sexual female names... I'...