All Comments on 'From Friends to Lovers Ch. 15'

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neruval442 about 4 years agoAuthor

Comments welcome

Sorry this particular chapter didn't seem to appeal so much - I'm open to feedback. Future chapters will perhaps become less 'immediately erotic' and develop the characters and the story, explore some other themes; but there'll still be some pretty full-on moments from time to time :)

Anonymousabout 4 years ago

It was a good chapter but..

It just seemed a bit rushed as if you were trying to get the entire episode into a small chapter. What did Sarah’s body look like. She was suppose to be a virgin. Birth control? Some hint that Beth and her would be together. What was the conversation about F/F sex? Shouldn’t have there been more discussion first before inviting Sarah to stay? Just some ideas. But enjoying this story very much.

neruval442 about 4 years agoAuthor

Thank you again :)

Thanks for the feedback about introducing Sarah - if you check out a story I'll post later about "Alice", hopefully I've thought about your comments.