by Lion24655
Bi47 - You are fantastic writer!!!!!!!! I love your stories!!!!!!!!! WTF?
The story seemed like it was written by a 12 Yr old.
Tony became Tom too many times to be from a fantastic writer!!!!
Should have called Tom Bob then you wouldn't have been so confused.
Very poor effort!!!!
You are fantastic writer!!!!!!!! I love your stories!!!!!!!!! Love to talk with you .
you had had the wrong name Tom instead of Tony way to many times which threw off the enjoyment of reading it every time it happened. Hopefully chapter 2 has been proof read a few times before it was published, otherwise I won't even bother reading it through the end.
A great story. Looking forward to reading about the daughters. The anal with the husband was a little unrealistic but nice work regardless.