by ericthebard
Had some potential. Better then the last piece of garbage I looked at.
Biggest complaints going forward- Way to Short, Too sappy/ Romantic, No backstory about the ghost he fucked senseless. Can't really jerk off to something like this!
What I enjoyed- Good spelling, I was able to visualize the story, it got me hard at least!
That was great ! One of the best short stories I have ever read .......the sex was tastefully done ....wonderful !
Stephen J
some of the best writing i've read. Keep on going and I'd better see a novel from you soon.....you're that good.
your storie turned me on and made me cry all at the same time . it's a storie i will never forget. thank you for writeing it.
Very touching. Very Romantic. Although tragedy and sorrow is involved(I'm referring to Alanna who unfortunately joined her creator) but never mind that comment. Perfectly a true love story.
I truly enjoyed this. Excellent characters for such a short story.
and if children happen because of this night, what kind are they?
You forgot to mention where that cemetary was, i've been known to stroll thru them as well. hehehe...
It was a good story and I enjoyed it. Thanks