by married_but_curious
I felt that the focus on blackness took away from the story. A beautiful woman is beautiful, no matter her color. The need to iinsert desired pregnancy and commit to a lifetime was ridiculous.
The way tension has been created between Hunter and alexis and their sex is written well. But the hyperbole about Alexis being a virgin then sleeping with sister's BF and wanting to get pregnant with him and wanting to get pregnant right after 1st sex is a bit too much to believe. Maybe that coud have been saved as a possibility or a hint.
Also, since this is marked as a threeway, it woud have been cool to see Cheri rewarding to Hunter with a quickie at the end there.