All Comments on 'Giving In'

I is not off of it is from.

It is not lay but lie.

Please learn English before you try to write.

Thank you for the criticism, albeit negative criticism. I am not sure what “I is not off of it is from” is referring to or what it means. And as for Lay vs Lie. I am not sure what line you are referring to, however ‘lay’ is the past tense of ‘lie’ and seeing that my story was told in past tense that is probably why I used it. However I am not a writer, I am just sharing a story or two in hopes that people enjoy them, so some grammatical errors are to be expected. I apologize.

I cannot believe the first Anonymous person being so uptight about two small errors. To suggest you learn English first is just rude. I enjoyed the story and there is nothing wrong with your English - just needs a bit more editing. Am I right in thinking there is a follow up story coming?

First off..thanks for sharing your experiences. The story was well written and provided enough detail that it had in fact occurred. I for one, feel the best storeis are those that were real experiences, without unreasonable embelishment. Lookig forward to reading more of your experiences. Don't let the negative criticism discourage you from sharing!

I belong to the BTB faction and usually like to see retribution when there is cheating involved. The character mentions feeling "terrible" about her cheating but, after the deed, gets wet exchanging glances and is ready it do it all over again. I don't see a lot of guilt here, specially with the last six closing words "did not happen again...that night"; this is leading to more cheating... with her boyfriend's nemesis, no less! Let's hope that Keith dumps her ass...

I think the story was great ! I feel like I probably would have reacted the same way as you making me enjoy the story even more, keep it up !