All Comments on 'Gotten My Cute Asian Ass Kidnapped'

Maybe it is the fat ex Mrs. Smith who comes through the door.

will like to find out what happened. may be it is both Mr and Mrs Smith.

Maybe the author could use spell check

"I'm". Not "Im". Please.

You are, overusing commas in, your writing. This, makes the reader pause, often at points, where a pause is unexpected and, breaks the narrative flow.

Meant in a constructive way. You have a great imagination and come up with hot stories. Thank you.