All Comments on 'Haley's Twin Pt. 01'

Great story! My one and only critique is to work on your wording, maybe have someone proofread and edit for you.

I'm guessing that English is not your first language, don't let that discourage you though. Looking forward to reading more!

Great try for your English literature. Please, please, find a museum or English Fluent editor.

You exhibit a tremendous desire to write porn in English. The potential is there! Work on it.it . You can do this.

Very nice, can't wait for more. I got the gist of the story and it was fine, try using Grammarly its free and makes you read slightly more professional.