All Comments on 'Hall P.A.S.S. Pt. 01'

Grat begining, Im excited to see where you take it. Well written, well done.

You are a total dirt-bag dude!!! But a great and interesting concept, and I can’t say I would do much different if given the opportunity… 5- Stars!!

Keep up the amazing writing, love where this is going, am in to this kind of kink!!!

You can plug in the device to keep it charged

Only need battery outside

I gave the story 5 stars. The concept was six stars, the writing four. Everyone is a critic... I'd liked to have more action and a little less worrying about the device. Still superb, keep writing!!!!