All Comments on 'Halloween Night'

Sorry this one sucked!

UGH!

After Darren slapped Amy for saying his name, I was done. Abuse is NOT erotica. Stories like this one should be banned long before stories about two 16 year olds making love and kissing are. 1/5

Got a bit convoluted about one third the way in.

Then just simple plain old what words wil fill the space

Three , only because you bothered,or so it seemed.

This garbage should not be here and all previous comments are correct, this author has some serious mental issues. Get rid of this crap ASAP.

Domestic abuse is not cool or cute

The worst history ever

This story left a lot to be desired. It seemed to have a good theme to it, centering around obedience, one orgasm for one chocolate, if I recall correctly. I wish it had been more like -- now, you need to take off whatever and show me your (tits, hairy pussy, large clit - whatever)? Not just a total dominating domestic type abuse story about a brother not in a good mood when she got home. This story could be re-written, and it could be improved on a lot with a little thought. I did not bother to rate it for several reasons.

I have been a member of this site since 1999. I have never suggested this idea before, however... You have talent. It is visible in your other stories. I would highly suggest you pull this story and do a re-write. Please read the comments from the others and act them out accordingly.

I look forward to the re-working.

Not my cup of tea.