All Comments on 'Halloween Weekend: Sunday'

So far it sounds good. I have 2 critics though. First would be to find a proof reader/editor. Second I would explain what happened to Lynn, How he died and how he became a vamp. Maybe also why he waited 5 years to go to her. What you have posted so far I like. Keep it up.

This isn't bad, but I feel as though you tell a lot without showing it. But still, a good read.

Having read all 3 posting of this story this morning, I find myself eager for the next installment. I can't wait so please hurry!