by Elaine_Mature
Good premise.
Not nearly enough foreplay/preliminaries.
Moved too fast to cock in pussy.
Needed much more atention to her breasts. Her nipples. Her clit.
Needed much more attention to his cock and balls.
Three stars.
Lovely build up but a little too fast through the foreplay and into sex. Could have spent more time with her breasts and clitoris. Still good enough.
I liked the pacing -- two inexperienced people getting aroused quickly, neither knew enough to slow things down. Five stars.
I thoroughly enjoyed this story. It's a great premise and should have It's own genre tag.