All Comments on 'Happy Birthday to Me!'

LOVED the anal seduction play, not into crossdressing much , but the rest of the scene...OMG...HOT HOT HOT

One of the best stories in this site. Please continue

please check pronouns

pleading for you to continue this insightful story . this is hot as fuck i'm trans and you have just described my fantasy first time i wish i could've had.thank you so much.hugs and kisses from me.

If English is not your primary language it would explain the mixing of first person and third person, but even if that's not the case I agree with the other commentator; you need an editor to help with grammar type stuff. However, your story itself was fun so please don't give up writing or take this constructive criticism too harshly.

Definitely one of the better stories here.

Thanks for pointing that out. I started writing this in third person but decided on first person and so had to go through and make the pronoun changes. Though I got them all and my beta reader didn't catch any of the others. But I may have posted the wrong edition. I'll give it a quick read through to be sure and try and get it corrected for everyone.

If anyone is or knows a quality beta reader who checks not just the grammar issues but also on story feedback I would love to get feedback on this and other stories. The second chapter is completed and being reviewed as of today.

the story was so good that it the pronouns didn't really bother. mildy distracting at first. it's an easy fix though, anyone who's first language is english can help you with that.

Please continue to write more of this story, i enjoyed it

Wow. I want this. I want to be him. I want more of the story. Need.

Very enjoyable and arousing story. The need for editing is a distraction, but the scenario is a delight to read.

Some grammar issues as previously noted, but an excellent and exciting story; please continue.

This story is fantastic !!!! I would love to get fucked by a she-male or tranny while I'm crossdressed in sexy lingerie. I can't wait to read more of your adventures with your new lover and also with Kelley and the other salesgirls from the store. I'm a sissy CD still in the closet but I truly wish (and dream all the time) that my wife (who has nice big tits) would fuck me with a big strapon dildo and then watch as I suck a big juicy real cock, showing her what a faggot sissy CD her husband is.

Please tell more stories. This one turned me on so much.

My wife goes to lingerie shops and I love going with her. She try's to embarrass me in front of the staff. I turn it around on her telling her I want to dress up for her so she can have her way with my ass. One of them passed by telling me she would love to watch.

Oh My ,

How I have loved reading your utterly delicious story , it's a shame it finished where it did as it was such a sensual thing to relate to . It seems I am not alone in wishing it was me being taken just so . Thank you for sharing it with us all , Please do find the time to add more to this delightful tale .

Hugs

Kathryn... x

Such a wonderful and erotic story about a young man discovering he pleasure of the flesh with a special woman.

I do hope that you intend on pursuing this one to many chapters.

Joanne

XOXOXO

Would like to see another chapter.

Agree for you to proof read in future.

Not sure what the plumbing does in the bath, but sounds effective. Why not just turn the water off?

Water in bath, electric appliance, tingles in the balls. Recipe for disaster.

Great story, kept me hard and leaking while reading it.

great story it kept me hard and leaking precum the entire time I was reading it.

You had my Top loving Asshole twitching & my little dick HARD.

I WOULD LOVE TO READ MORE PLEASE KEEP THE STORY CUMMING.

Great story layout & theme.

I am so turned on now.

I love special Lady's that can work on special guys like me.

XOXO

Spl. Lady Lover