by Girlfunk
You have a good thing started here just don't make hubby out to be the wimp.
Now that Simon had fucked her and shot her full of his sperm, perhaps he can withdraw and put Richard temporarily out of his misery and go back and fuck here some more with Richard passed out unconscious. The second time around, perhaps she can get up with Simon's sperm running down her legs that have not penetrated one of her eggs, and she can get Richard to the doctor and hospitalized. After Richard goes into the hospital, perhaps Simon can cum back and ensure that she starts carrying his baby in her belly?
The plot and main events of the story are extremely well thought out, but, could you possibly submit your next editions to an editor to clear up your grammatical errors.
And more information on Josie's past with Richard and Simon would be nice.
Girlfunk, you have to write more to this story. Make the husband and lover fight, then have a threesome with the wife. good idea?
I thought you had a good idea, but your grammar was terrible, and the sentence flow and structure also need work. I would suggest contacting an editor for your next piece.