All Comments on 'Harper’s Reckoning'

I like it. Had good feel in its simplicity, but pretty original, at least for this catagory

Lady – you are probably going to be flamed for this one. I expected it to be a burn the bitch story. That's a new term I've learned here. But this was a head twister when I realized Laura was the husband ... you're a glutton for punishment, girl. Still, I give this a five-star rating for a well-told story and a nice twist in this category. I hope others don't lash your posterior like the women in the wooden stocks.

Loved the concept and the story, not everything has to be the same.

Well written, might be better for fetish than loving wives category. If it was in fetish would give it a 5. Since it is in loving wives I give it a three. Your writing is spot on though. Nice little twists put in. Will love to read more of your work

Sincerely,

Payenbrant

You hid well the fact that the spouse is a woman, so it truly was a twist. I had to reread part of the story to find where I missed the clues, but I still didn't see any, so you managed well with the twist. On the other hand, there is a category specifically for this type of relationships. To be honest, I was a bit miffed after I got what happened, but it still is a good story. Only it feels to me like the wrong category, but other categories have blurred lines as well. Dunno, up to the ppl I guess.

I wouldn't have read this if it had been labelled Lesbian, but I enjoyed it. Great story with a good twist at the end and accurately placed in LW. 5*

This is not a LW story. Should be in Lesbian, where I could have ignored it.

Guys (it is mostly guys, right?), I wanted to apologize for one thing. I got my edited versions muddled - 👱‍♀️👱‍♀️👱‍♀️ - and reintroduced some typos I had already fixed and then didn’t notice. Kinda pissed really. Fixed verison in the pipeline, but won’t be there for a few weeks. Em

Wrong category. Don't care if they are married. Not okay.

First Emily OMG this is so good. The haters are right, Loving Wives does not deserve this gem. Most of the basement dwellers who inhabit this category and who spend their days trying to figure out what a woman is in real life, will hate everything about it. Even with typos it is better than 90% of the dross that is usually here. Right this moment I am in love. Everything about this story is genuine and well done, typos not withstanding. As far as categories, yes it could have been in Lesbian and the poor incels could carry on wanking over women and problems they will never have, but but it would not have been so perfectly placed as it is here. Thank you for this story, thank you for having balls bigger than most of the readers of this category and putting it here, just thank you. Five stars of course, a fav story, and a new follower.

I liked it. The missing gender references from the onset revealed the nature of the marriage; you get credit for trying, at least. Nice twist to wrap things up. Ignore the naysayers, it's a good one for LW that... oh, geez... just happened to break the same ol' formula. Good for you.

To be totally honest, Em, I have some difficulty with the clipped style you typically start your stories with. That said, I can feel it when you relax into the meat of the story, the flow becomes even and - dare I say - comfortable.

A well-deserved 5. Thank you.

"That's right bitches, is your skin burning yet? You bitches both deserve to burn." We see what you did there. BTB. Ha.

I really liked this, Emily. Yes a departure, but a pleasant surprise to find it in this category. Much more pleasant than finding dick in the the Lesbian category. There was one point there where Laurel addressed herself, but I'll take you at your word that some found error crept back into the published version. Anyway, I liked the way it came together, and would certainly like to find the future some day in another chapter, if you'd like!

Damn, Em, you can write one hell of a love story, and at the end of the day, that is what this is

Mia in the middle — could not help myself. Delightfully erotic; loved the surprise/revelation and the ending. Glad you posted in LW — why not.

Most original Loving Wives story I've read in a long time. Wonderful twist at the end!

Interesting story. Liked it.

That she kept referring to her ‘spouse’ and not her husband was a clue early on that she was in a lesbian marriage. You might have considered simply using a gender-neutral name for her to refer to and then the average reader would have assumed the spouse was male.

The real surprise twist was the relationship that had already existed between Mia and Laura and the nature of same. Others have mentioned this story should have been submitted in the fetish or lesbian categories and while I can’t totally disagree, I still think posting this in Loving Wives was perfectly appropriate.

I'm giving ***** for the story, for the writing, for the fact I didn't see the twist coming. I have one question what was her kink she didn't reveal to Laura?

Nice story, enjoyed the characters, but have to consider whether drinking Zinfandel is suited to LW. Feels more appropriate for Fetish or BDSM maybe.

Well, it was nice to s something different. A well thought out tale, and I enjoyed the flow. The characters were interesting and you managed to bring them to life.

An enjoyable read, well deserving of the 5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your talent.

Cagivagurl

I thought the story is spectacular, all the more so because it's in the Loving Wives rubric. I just discovered you as an author and I am looking forward to reading more of your stuff. Congratulations on this story. Five stars, JB Edwards

Great, but so different, story. Had to reread the part where Laura walks in on Harper and Mia because it caught me off guard for a bit. Guess I'm just a little slow but it finally sunk in what was happening. Hell, I was just reading along enjoying the story and was missing so many clues, duh. Got to wonder about the ending though, they were in a wooden stock that smelled of creosote. That shit is some bad stuff and can cause health problems from just breathing the fumes let alone getting any on the skin. Anyway, liked the story, the twist at the end and the 'happy' ending.

Wrong category

I'm ashamed to admit that I didn't understand that the FMC was in a lesbian marriage until her wife walked in on her. What a riot to put this in LW rather than the lesbian category. This will cause many BTB heads to explode.

I really appreciated the effective use of First Person perspective. Few authors can pull it off. Most spend far to much verbiage regaling the readers with unnecessary details of their life history.

i gave you 4 stars thank you for your twist

Couldn't get past the first few paragraphs.

This was a twist on a cheating wife. I figured something was not right but it all came together when Laura came through the door.

I liked it, definitely a different take on a loving wife story. Sure, it could have gone in lesbian but I think this is a better place for it. Sadly, not everyone will agree but I think those people probably don't enjoy half the content here due to their beliefs. Thank you for sharing!

It’s in the right category

You did well

5 ⭐️

Just out for a troll? Now you can giggle about how naughty you are, trolling all the mean LW meanies. God, how childish.

Kinky as usual, and lovely as always. Thanks for dipping your toe in here, Em!

chef's kiss.

Wrong category. I would have skipped on by if it had been in fetish or lesbian where it belongs. That dropped it from a 4 to a 2.

Wrong category, should have been lesbian. The twist wasn't a surprise, it was pretty clear from the outset. Skipped most of the rest.

'Proverbialasshole, the first 'clue', at least for me, is when 'Harper' is searching in a 'purse' for a vape pen. One star.

The story had some Red Herrings which were good however the married couple action seemed contrived and a bit awkward.

Thank you for a great story. For once, I didn't catch on until the intervention by the "spouse". Well done for the clever disguise, as I wasn't even suspicious. Yes, as a male, I have encountered married ladies that had many, deeply erotic, fantasies and desires not only to be submissive (that their husbands never knew) but also bi desires that they had surpresed for many years. That also their husband never knew. It gave me a lot of enjoyment to draw out their desires and intro them to bi ladies I knew. Thanks again for the story. Cheers.

Captain Obvious alert! I'm a nitpicker. Many find my nitpicks obvious at best, annoying at worst. If that bothers you, please just go onto the next comment, because I won't be changing in this lifetime.

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I agree with your professor. Set the hook to make us want to read the story. Any pertinent details will be come out in due course during the story. If they don't then they weren't important.

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"Work is far from the center of my life." - So it' probably doesn't need to be mentioned.

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I'm getting bored already with all the description, and we still haven't got to the real, action.

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Sorry, couldn't make it past page one, boring.

fun take on loving "wives". Kudos for opening that door albeit a bit too much kink for me.

great story, i dont usually comment but this was great, loved the twist and the eroticism of it.

Would have thought that this would have been in the lesbian section

Well written! I had no clue Laura was a woman until she showed up. I enjoyed it.

Emily is able to tell a story, and tell it well. The story wasn't for me, or designed to be so. She has apologized for the wrong version printed, so the typos like 'make' instead of naked and the very typical 'martial' instead of marital, found in so many stories, can be excused. I'm baffled by the content- lesbians, women in general, are supposed to be the communicative, sensitive ones. Adverse to inflicting pain on others. Loyal to friends and spouses. Here, it's all reversed, and it seems in Emily's world, men are not to be mentioned or have any thing to do with. The male version of that would be called a chauvinist sexist pig. What's the opposite of 'toxic masculinity'?

This is an untagged lesbian story, the 'marriage' is a lesbian one. This is merely additional contamination of the Loving Wives concept by communities outside of the straight, heterosexual paradigm. This story explores fetishism and BDSM in addition to the main purpose of offering validation to a deviant lifestyle. None of this story was the stuff of Loving Wives. The writer stooped to deceit in order to have their material posted in Loving Wives, no doubt a category that offers more views than either Lesbian Sex, Fetish, or BDSM. Most likely combined! These categories are like Picasso paintings for the soul and are not the venues of typical Loving Wives clientele. Regardless of receiving five star comments, this piece was below three stars, at 2.76 when writing this review. This means that more of the readership hit 'Dislike' or 'Hate It' than anything higher than three stars. I suspect selective comment deletion is the reason for this, as there are only 18 comments posted. Keeping the supporters, tossing the non-complementary jibes.

this and nearly every story you have is self absorbed garbage. do you need attention that bad? you know this story does not belong in this category. you must not be getting fucked well out in the real world to be so desperate for followers and comments you put a lesbian story into LW. its a shame because it seems like you might be a decent writer if you weren't so obsessed with licking your own asshole

wish there was a rating lower than one star

When you get praise from NeuturedGrendelpuppy, you know you're not only in the wrong category, but you're posting here for bait.

You'll get the usual, "Wrong category", comments...but I suspect you already knew that and planned it that way.

Well done.

Great story with a great twist at the end. I do not know why the complaints about being in the wrong category when many of the diatribes in "Loving wives" are anything but loving wives and at the end of the day Harper is a wife.

Not sure about the title "HARPER’S RECKONING" it was Laura that cheated first and used their money, it should have been her in stocks not Harper getting her ass red. Just my thoughts. Still an excellent story.

Nice twist that the wife was a woman. The LW category threw that angle off.It caught me off guard. Slow beginning, but it was well worth reading to the end. *****

Wonderful offbeat LW story! Thank you so much for sharing your creativity. 5 stars

I will give you credit for trying to include a twist, although you mostly failed by trying way too hard to keep from revealing the spouse's gender.

Sadly, that's all the good I can really say about this. The writing style sucked. The category you chose was not the best (or even second best) for this story. Your tags were only 2/3 correct. I also took a look at your list of works and can clearly see that you have serious issues. Not everything is a series. I'm guessing you're a bit anal retentive and allow that impulse to override your intellect, which would also explain a lot about the poor writing style and category choices.

I'm not saying it's a bad story. I'm just saying that the way you presented it lowers it's value, kind of like serving a gourmet meal on a dirty plate. As presented, it struggles to earn a 2. Presented properly, it would be an easy 3 and might even garner a 4.

Fix the tags.

Very well put-together tale cleverly disguised lesbian relationship.. Not my usual first choice story but being blind-sided somewhat made it OK. I have no prejudices only preferences and I prefer a well written story to a cookie-cutter job, well done Emily and I love your picture, very sexy.

Just wanted to say that I’ve not deleted a single comment (yet). Wishful thinking much 🤭. Em

Great twist! No, the other one.

Everyone's so tall!

Thank you Emily, far from the usual LW offering but really beautifully written in my opinion and an interesting story, two betrayals and hopefully one big reasonably happy ending. Well done.

I've just seen your comment on mot having deleted a single comment. We've written a similare number of stories so I'm only saying this as a relative equal. Don't delete comments, if someone rrads your story let them comment no matter hwo mean they appear. I've had one Anon who would like me to be kicked to death in an alley - so what, jsut someone venting, let them, I usually laugh at most comments good or bad.

Whatever you decide for you, is fine, that's just my opinion, thanks again, excellent story.

Ooops sorry my dyslexia shining through

Wrong category, s/b Lesbian.

I appreciate the mention, but I don’t recall adding much beyond warning you of the potential blowback and encouraging you to go with it anyway 😆.

As usual, great work.

I'd love to stick around, but I've got a bee allergy and you've kicked up quite the hornets nest. 😉

Disappointed by this story. I don't typically read lesbian, fetish, or BDSM stories. Thus, I felt used by the author's placement of the story in LW. I was kind of bored by much of the story, but I try to finish every story I start. 2 stars

Jumping into the fray. This is a very good story, and the twists work well. I was entertained, turned on, and happily surprised by the stories change of direction. Please keep up the writing standard and thank you.

Fun and sexy with an interesting twist at the end. Well done.

Nice and hot story! Well written!! 5 stars!

Not nearly as cute as you thought it was.

Very well executed. Terrific story

Nicely done and very well written.

so two cheaters find a common bond - age....

To clarify, as I seem to have edited out part of my comment that I did not intend to: 2/3 of the tags you used were correct. However, I did not mean to imply that your overall tagging was anywhere close to correct, as you failed to include many relevant and important tags.

The pain was exquisite. WTF? ex·quis·ite: adjective: extremely beautiful and, typically, delicate.

Thanks for sharing your imagination and skill.

Absolutely the correct category for the story.

@RanDog025 - I’m not answering comments on here in general (I have PMed some people who are registered on the forums) and certainly not looking to get into arguments. But I know what exquisite means and yes it is entirely appropriate. You should ask someone who knows what they are doing to use a flogger on you sometime. Then you will understand. Em

Interesting troll

More often it's gay men who troll in this manner, amusing themselves by tricking straight folk into their world. A telling end of one sentence was her getting excited by the deception. Author assumes in the intro, prolly correctly, that most LW readers are male. She's prolly still giggling at having tricked all the smelly hairy heteros into her sapphic world.

Still, a pretty good read.

That was Great!!

@sbrooks103x

Captain Obvious alert! I'm a nitpicker. Many find my nitpicks obvious at best, annoying at worst. If that bothers you, please just go onto the next comment, because I won't be changing in this lifetime.

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I agree with your professor. Set the hook to make us want to read the story. Any pertinent details will be come out in due course during the story. If they don't then they weren't important.

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"Work is far from the center of my life." - So it' probably doesn't need to be mentioned.

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I'm getting bored already with all the description, and we still haven't got to the real, action.

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Sorry, couldn't make it past page one, boring.

If you want to know boring, read one of your own stories!

Edit SNAFU all fixed now. Em

Good twist and good story!

To the 67% of commanders who were positive, thank you. To the neutrals and polite negatives, thank you also To those with not much else to do but troll, I wrote you a poem. https://forum.literotica.com/threads/i-keep-a-troll-as-a-pet.1588423/ Emily

@ EmilyMiller

Pretty sweet ending! Laura gets a RAAC and a double BTB too! I can't fathom why you only have a 67% comment approval rating. Since your ending satisfies both of the main LW factions it should be closer to 95%.

Not entirely our thing but loved it none the less.

Favorite author list!

@simplywizard_not - sorry for the delayed reply and thanks 😊. Em

@LIDiver - thank you 😊. Em

Tags?

I read this because of your Playground post, and it held me from the start to almost the finish, at which point it hit me right out of the ballpark…

Great story, I loved every bit of it.

And screw your English professors and their potential criticism of your story structure, it’s doubtful they could write something this tight and enthralling.

Thanks!

@Dalelaw2164 - that is very kind of you to say. Thank you 😊 Em

You ended this by saying it's a bit different for "loving wives" , and some….😄

I think you really got that so well nailed as a story, great character set, plot and descriptions, and of course the twist. So week done..thank you

I gave it 1 star. I get pissed off when authors purposefully use miss leading story tags and put their stories into the wrong categories. The ending didn’t work for me because the plot was given away by the way the author started the story. She only gave a physical description of the main character

and not her spouse which meant the spouse was female. Ok the ladies are all lesbians how do we try to make a lame story better? I know let’s add BDSM or some other fetish to spice it up! This story seemed like it was written by a group of teenagers starting with an idea then trying to one up each other with more outrageous ideas till all your left with stupidity.

I liked it! It was definitely not what I expected and that's another reason why I liked it. I have never really been into BDSM but this was a nice intro to it.

@marriedexec2023 - it was written as layers of misdirection. I was assuming astute readers would see through the first twist, but be hit by the second. The epilogue was me having fun. Em

Sorry. You write well and that alone made this a pleasure to read. But “wife” or no, this story should be in the gay category, subsection lesbian. It is not what I want to read, and whether this is biased or not, I think “Loving Wives” is an implied hetero category, which is what I was looking for. I am NOT judging sexual preference here, to each her own, just asking for respect for the categories and traditions of Lit., and the readers. That being said, you are a terrific and very sensual writer and I wish you well.

@Anon - thank you for the polite and reasoned response. And for the kind comments on my writing. I understand your POV. Em

UGH. Sorry, a RAAC doesn't stop being a RAAC just because there's two women involved instead of a heterosexual couple. This was well written, but no writing quality can save RAAC from being an awful depressing read :( And no dumb excuse about "I didn't want to soil our marriage with BDSM so I went to a prostitute" can fix the fact that she's a cheating scum... actually both of them are. I'm adding one point for the bait and switch with Laura ending up being a woman, I didn't expect that - so, 3.5 stars total, rounding to 4 because honestly those two cheaters deserve each other and good thing they aren't inflicted on innocent honest population.

@ inka2222 - thanks for the feedback. Em

I think this was the wrong story for me from the time that ima got that call and immediately Harper was turned on by Mia's distress or that's how it felt to me, then to find the reaction to one broken relationship was to instigate another. I do like your stories but this wasn't mine. Sorry.

I really love the characters in this story, which in my mind at least belongs in the LW category because it concerns two married people who just happen to be lesbians. The story is their marriage, not their being lesbians. I enjoyed the ending, leaving tons of scope for further development in a number of directions.

@Devilboy - I write a wide range of stuff - not all will appeal to everyone - Emily

@Flameethrow - thank you 😊 Emily

This was exquisite. A testament to the power of communication… its strength to build, and when absent, its strength to destroy from the inside like a cancer. We avoid being authentic for fear of being rejected. It’s agonizing. I think most people go through that, to varying degrees, whether they know it or not. Fear, insecurity, lack of awareness; however it manifests, are the result of a lack of acceptance, maybe love, as well. I’m not sure what the answer to that is. It seems do be a vicious spiral.

This story was written quite well. Full marks.👍🏻

@rbloch66 - thank you so much 😊 Emily

Purlitzer ,…. really!?!? I missed that first time around. I suspect it was intentional, to bolster the lack of writing ability of your character.

@rbloch66 - no, just my awful spulling 😬 Emily