All Comments on 'Having Faith'

erotic

I cannot wait until the next part.

Totally loved your story, would love another part to it where her father makes her pregnant! x

Very promising beginning and looking forward to the continuation of the story.

narrative keeps switching from first to third person in what is supposed to be Faith's POV. confusing, difficult to follow

That was a wonderful story! I love the details, the way you told both sides of the story, and captured the longing between both of them, as well as the release that they both felt at the ending. Excited to see more stories like this!

Good story, but you need an editor. You kept changing voices from the narrator to the daughter, to her father.

Keep writing and I do hope you another chapter

Please continue.

REALLY HOT

SO HOT!!!!

Please continue. Looking forward to their future endeavors for the rest of the Summer.

Maybe Daddy is willing to pay for some extras, such as a threesome with Zoey and whatever else he has fantasied about for the last few years.

Agree with tallman441 ... and more. That makes the story as been writen by a child. In 3 paragraphs I counted 9 "crowns", then stopped counting. Do you have a "crown-kink" ?

As others have said…you loose readers as you mix up first person singular and them add second person at the same time. I for one stopped reading after the cloaked figure was revealed.