by Amber_Embers
Nice, now what about Zoey?
Will she be present when the cherry is popped?
So far, so good. Please give us more!
GREAT story.. this chapter is much better with it staying from just one POV. Keep going and stay with the daughter, or if you switch it around, make each POV it's own section. Can't wait for the next part.
Your narrative voice is much clearer than the jumble that was part 1. Much improved. It seems this could be a long, luxurious series.
This was better than 1st chapter. Better edited and told. Less repetitive of expresions.