by pentopaper
Cut out or modify the sex scenes and this would probably make a very good comedy film. Ella, late thirties going on sixty and Marissa, early twenties going on ten---they make one hell of a combination. Laurel and Hardy? Nothing in it! Definitely another fine mess they've gotten themselves into. Five stars for the smile the story brought to my face.
You are a talented and gifted writer. One of my new favourites! I've read most of your stories since finding this the other day. Please continue putting "pen to paper" to share with us. Thanks.
Despite my discomfort with the power imbalance, the sheer lunacy tickled the hell out of me--it was more fun than it should have been and it wasn't actually clear which direction the exploitation was going in--both, maybe? The writing was good enough that I rarely noticed it, which is a Very Good Thing from a reader's point of view. 5*