by kevinlaroche
i love the premise of the story but it needs editing badly. get that done and it could be a solid 4 or 5 stars
Good start. I really like your other stories, as I'm a femdom story fan, and I'm looking forward to finding out just how you take this story forward.
How the hell is just eating a salad and some bread healthy? Only if you are trying to lose weight is that a good idea. Add some high protein food and get rid of the bread