All Comments on 'His Beloved'

I liked what there was of the girl's tale ... but how can you have a series of one part .. will there be a part 2 of this one part series?

??? No story here, not even the start of one really. Finish the story, or at least the first chapter before submitting. Not even a hint as to why it is in the Romance category.

WTF?

Intriguing beginning. The composition is good; plot development segues from point to point smoothly--but without greater background the setting is inadequate to establish what is going on.

Keep writing. I look forward to embellishment in coming chapters.

MLJ

What in world kind of half-written story is this?

This is like a preamble to something, anything, that sort of builds you up - just before it unexpectedly drops you off the cliff in the void of nowheresville?????

It amazes us that it was thought that this was an actual finished something - and time to actually publish whatever it is?????

Too short!

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