by MsMarg
This read like a start to her in charge yet she asked him to allow her to be in charge. I suspect she will (the author) will gradually increase her sexual dominance over the young man.
Terrific opening. Well-written, enticing set up for the long tale you tell us you are writing. I already have good insight about your engagingcharacters and the situation allows me to infer exciting scenes to come.
I hooked!!!
This is 10 times better than any fifty shades of grey book.
Especially with a mature female taking total control of a young guy.
I love it and I am also so envious of Jessie.
I already know I'm gonna enjoy this series immensely and thanks MsMarg.
I'm so glad I've found you!
5stars for this btw and added you to my favorites ;)
life is not peaches and cream for everyone. this sounded good. never been into any heavy BDSM, always light, but I do know how tough life can be.
But NEVER let me read anymore of this garbage.
What was he getting out of the abuse? Too one-sided. Lacked originality and the dialogue was dull, flat and lacked any spark of believability. Doesn't even rate a "1".
How I wish I were Jessie. To be totally naked and under the control of a female who wanted to use me and have no control over the matter. My whole body just aced for the experiences he was having.
This is absolutely amazing!! I would definitely come back for more. I love how everything just goes slowly and sensually and when I went to your page looking to read more, I found out it was your first. Please update soon and I'm so fucking horny right now.
I like the way the characters are developing, almost like I know them. I hope she takes him to the very edge of pain and pleasure again and again as she becomes sexually addicted to tormenting and using him.
I wish you well with it! If it carries on the way it has started, we are all in for something of a treat. As a first offering here at Literotica this is really quite outstanding; very well done and please bring us more of this soon. Five stars without the least hesitation. Thank you for sharing a wonderful talent with us.
Great start and I can't wait to read more. Thanks for writing and sharing it with us.
Went to look for more by you....this was your first! Double awesome for a first story! You must wriite more.
Well written. You told us just enough about him to set the stage. I like her concern for safety and hope it is true as the story progresses. I also hope she becomes mentor as well as mistress. Something positive in his life and not a destructive force. I was a bit taken aback at the face slap-seemed over reactive, especially since there is not yet anything established between them. (Then again, I just don't like face slaps period.) Will they have a meaningful discussion next time about the details of this? It so weakens things if the sub must play guess what you are supposed to do/guess what you did wrong. Enough blathering, loved it. Eager for more.