All Comments on 'Holly’s Sales Training Ch. 04'

..this is hard to read!

Maybe next time you can try to bear in mind that we're not all juveniles who speak like tweenies!

I think there was a great story here. But it's so hard to make it out that I gave up.

It's like it's being read to me by Dr. Evil's son, Scott!

I agree with the other commentor. There's a great story under here somewhere but it's almost impossible to read or make sense of. I have no real understanding of where the main character is emotionally and it's quite painful to get through and so I'm totally uninvested in it.

Not sure who convinced you this was the right move but it'd be worthwhile taking a step back and asking yourself if rewriting it in a more traditional style might not be the right move.

I was really excited for this series as you are an amazing writer that really develops characters. The whole blog setup is making it hard for me though. Vanessa series still your best work and a continuation would be awesome as the ending really could develop into more.

I'm still excited and think the writing is excellent. The blog style makes it unique!!!

It's definitely something different to the same-old same-old you can find all too often on literotica.

It's a great story! The contrast between Holly's perception and the actual action is superbly done.

Nice chapter ! It is so awesome when Slut Holly admits defeat ! I hope there is more scenes like that to come. The ending is Top Notch: we know that her firing is just a setback in her developpment. And again, I like how she responds to her followers: not seeing the sexist and patronizing ways, she just accepts them !!!