All Comments on 'Hormone Therapy Ch. 01'

I really enjoyed this story. But I fail to understand the title. Oh, and it's 'hormone', not 'hormon'.

thank you! It really means a lot. This is my first story. There are more chapters to come, 30 are written already.

Thank you for pointing out the spell error in the title. That is the only part I didn't use spellchecker on...

The title might not be very good anyway. I will rename it at some point - I don't even know if that is possible though.

While the story was fun and hot. You never made any connection to the girls suddenly wanting to have sex with people they wouldnt have normally dont it with and the experiments. There is a huge disconnect there. I understand that this is a long term story (30 chapters) but you finishing this chapter with a final telling as to Tania's future made things even more confusing. That isnt normally done unless 1) the story is over or her part in it is over, giving us closure with the character, The end of this chapter feels very much like an end to the story and with zero hits much less explanation as to how the scans could have caused any of this. You clearly made it sound as if Tania was a total slut who wanted to play with the guy to begin with. Only Hannah's reaction seemed out of place. Too many elements missing causing to many disconnects in my opinion. Best of luck on the next chapter.

Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I appreciate this a lot. You are completely right that most is not clear from this chapter (and the next). You will see where things are going after Chapter 4. Maybe I should have kept it together as one long story, not breaking it into chapters? I will think about this more.

For your explanation: it is true that Tania is out and this was intended as a closure. It is true that Tania is a total slut and why that is will become clear - she has a special brain function that explains it and leads to the discovery of hx34. Hannah is actually just a bit of an addition, maybe out of place here - I added her later when I felt horny myself, so maybe a bit overblown - sorry, if that seemed out of place. She could be deleted out without much problem if that improved things. More feedback on this is highly appreciated

I kind of wonder if one should follow up on Tanias mother... I am tempted to write more on her. Maybe she needs more babies? There could be a younger sister of Tania? How would the mother react if she was screwing Tim when suddenly Tania came home with her teacher and gave him a blowjob while Tim and the mother were hiding naked behind the sofa? What would happen if Tanias mother screamed when the teacher erupted into Tanias mouth and they discovered her and Tim? Would Tania continue to ride Tims hardon and the teacher get another blow from the mother? Would Tanias junger sister wake up from the orgy downstairs and join in, get her cherry broken in the process? I dont really know at the moment.

Nice!

Thank you @dambrosia4 - this comment means a lot to me!!!

BTW, the best of this series is still to come, so come back for more.

My favorite is Ch.32... so a lot to read until then ;)

You seriously rocked this story. You kept the sex scenes raucous and entertaining without the usual upset partners ruining it. This story could continue with so many varied chapters and considering your writing style and talent you would come up with some outrageously wild situations. I can’t wait to read more of your work.

James

Thank you James for your appreciation! This means a lot to me. There are already 30+ chapters written, which will be released soon. Every time I read a chapter myself, I find so many mistakes and holes - or get new ideas for little add-ons though. I find it hard to "finalize" a chapter - and the editing process on this website is rather slow because moderators need to approve everything, even minor edits like "hormon->hormone" - so I wait to collect the edits for a few weeks.

Anyway, thanks again for your nice comment James - this keeps me going

Please read the following chapters and let me know which ones are best - there is a lot of variety in them!

Love this. Could use a touch more detail Avignon how he fucked her in the MRI. was she in a chair, a full length table? You say it has arm rests but also a table. I hs double wrapping my head around this scenes like doing her standing up while she's laying in a table

Thank you upyoursix for your comment. I guess, I kind of assumed people have had brain scans in an MRI - like I had several times - and didnt describe it enough for those fortunate enough to never had it. In short: You lay down on a table, get strapped in (especially your head). Then the table slides into a huge magnet, the size of a room, and you listen to relaxing music while the machine does its magic. It is a very narrow tunnel and people get sometimes stressed to a degree just from the feeling of being confined and unable to move, they need sedation. They try to make you forget where you are by music - and sometimes 3Dgoogles - so you don't panic. Sedation requires a lot of extra work, supervision, etc. - and is potentially life threatening - so those machine manufacturers try hard to make the experience pleasant given the space constrains. In reality, these scanners are also very loud - but we assume that Tom has a hyper-advanced model that is silent

In the next version of this chapter, I will clarify this. It is very valuable to me to get such feedback! Thank you again