All Comments on 'Horny on the Beach'

The story made absolutely no sense at all.

Why do you persist with the squirting BS? Weird writing, you're trying too hard to impress.

You wrote this like the sister was just a little girl made it sound creepy I suggest you read other stories on here before you try writing another I'm sorry but it is not a good of even a decent read or story when you make 1 of the main characters look and sound like a little child it makes it closer to child porn and nobody wants to read about that if you keep writing stories this way you are liable to get reported and investigated so word of advice read other stories in the category you're wanting to post in before writing another story and get a editor

The sister who is supposedly the older sister was made out to sound like a little child which is a turn off. Word of advice read other stories in this category or any category that you are wanting to post in before writing another story no 1 will like stories the way this was wrote you made it sound sick and creepy if you keep that up someone will end up reporting you and having you investigated for child pornographic