All Comments on 'Hot Chocolate with Cream'

Hi, my car won't start, oh, then come to my house. Have some wine and let's fuck. Where's the story?

Absolutely enjoyed it. Can there be a follow on story that takes things further along?

Your story has merit, but lacks insight into the characters. It comes over as naïve, almost as if written by a child, which is odd after a good number of stories published. Suggest you try to get an experienced editor and ask them to help, not just with proof reading, but with improving style. There are many odd constructions: it should be “I’m not the boss for nothing”, for example.

Those of us who have worked for a Hot Boss, get the story….a daydream comes true. I especially liked the glimpses of the lucky guys mind chatter as it does just that…nice story telling device, nice quickie…thanks Alexis

Her Hardness delivers another great story. Nice quickie. Fun!