All Comments on 'Hot Pizza Delivery'

Cute story, erotic enough to get blood working Thanks

Agree — can still be entertaining and this short piece was. Humorous and as you say hot largely because the short piece was well written — even got a glimpse of your two characters.

Short, sweet and funny!

4

Nothing wrong with the cliches - loved it

sorry, random hookups just aren't erotic. It's not even wank material, really. Like an outline of story that could be good, if we knew anything at all about these two people, or why there was a spark of anything other than animal lust between them.

Mushrooms, sausage, and an order of cannoli 😂 Lovely, sexy short story

Too cliché, too fast to get much out of it, and other than a comment that it was hot outside, really nothing in the spirit of the contest. Writing is good though, this has potential to be flushed out into a nice erotic dalliance.

I that story makes me wanna start delivering pizza