All Comments on 'Hotel Rendezvous Pt. 01'

Very nice.... look forward to reading the next part

Nice story but I would definitely recommend you try an editor or proof reader, the poor grammar and spelling do detract from the story interrupting the flow of the story.

It’s an easy enough fix and would be a great improvement.

Things like:

she’d not shed (she had and not a garden outbuilding)

in case not encase (being prepared for something and not completely covered in something)

she travelled not she travel

fingers deep in her not fingers deep in here.

Maybe try reading it aloud to yourself? Thanks for sharing

Tess (uk)