All Comments on 'How a Hiking Turns into a Breeding Marathon Pt. 01'

Oh, I hope there is more. I want to hear of those cocks long deprived of release being put in those pussies deep and allowed to discharge their seed and impregnate these gals. Four studs with two pussies; love it.

Loved it. Please continue.

It was good, but you really need to do some editing or get a beta reader.

I hope the guys put a bun in the oven of Lisa and Beth!

Not the worst story I've ever read, but there are enough typos and odd grammatical errors to warrant some sort of revision.

I really like this, please continue

Proof reading is a must... at some points it was nonsensical which ruined the flow of the writing.

Omg do men really think we can FEEL when we ovulate!!!😂😂 there's ovulation pain for SOME women, but unless she knows her cycle like the back of her hand. Will just think it's normal pain.

Well i have felt ny ovulation several times during the past 15 years (though not every time, not even nearly), and there is no "normal pain" to confuse it with. Pain during menstruation is close, but the timepoint is entirely different.

Have to agree with everyone about the editor. Not just a proofreader, but someone who is able to talk with you about the flow of the story as well.

Four hard horny cocks shooting those two in heat pussies full of cum made me hard; just wish I could of eaten all that seed out of them. Hope we get another chapter and find out that both bellies are swollen up! Breed them fuckers.

waiting for next parts of this story, describing more in details sexual acts in many different positions

Very nice but how about that second chapter. And hoping the guys knock them up.

Umm unless a woman has cysts on her ovaries or some other serious health issues she isn't going to feel ovulation and those that do think they do they are actually feeling the medical issues flairing up from hormones not the actual ovulation. If they feel pain around when they are fertile it's usually a cyst rupture or endometriosis