All Comments on 'How My Parents Became Nudists Pt. 01'

The amazing feeling of wanting your father inside you.

Good start to a many chapter story.

Please fill in your BIO, so many don’t and that puts people off for reading the stories.

Mine has been filled in since day ones

Nice start----more to come I hope???

I agree with others about the great start. Five stars so far to encourage your writing. Parts 2,3,4 soon I hope. Many thanks.

Liked the story and interested in reading more. A suggestion is either get an editor or at least reread. Several spelling issues and punctuation issues also. Try and make your chapters a bit longer. It may flow better for you.

It would really be nice if you had finished the story

I’m going to withhold judgement and see what you do next . Will you finish a strong introduction, or let it lay and rot?

Has the makings of a super series, but will you continue.?

Keep writing!

Munchie184

So many spelling errors it actually made it hard to read, please reread your story next time before posting them, that and a lot of back story with no action

And? Will you be continuing this story, or are you just a tease?

Lots of possibilities. Time to take it further

Try and write shorter sentences. Avoid conjunctions. Proofread your work by reading it out loud, preferably to another person.

Good start! Wait until Mom see what fat cock he is packing , that will leave dad feel cucked!

Nice. Family nudism is great. I know this is part 1, but feel free to make subsequent parts longer, 3-4 pages at least.

Too short. It felt like it had barely just started. Good start, though.

Good start. You need an editor.

Way, way to short, but for a first submission, really really good. It would be interesting to know what word processing software you are using as many of them have some interesting tools that could help you with things like spelling, punctuation, word choice, and appearance. Check them out and see what you think. For me, that alone was half the fun of learning how to write. Good luck.😃

This is just a beginning of a story. It would have been a lot better if you had another chapter before sending it in.

I've been thinking about your submission and I wanted to add a piece of advice. On page count, try to submit your documents with a word count of around 10,000. Since the average word count per page in this forum is 3,700, it gives you a good average length of submission.

Good start please continue!! Also fill in your bio!! Please be as depraved as you like!!

A great start. Lots of useful comments from other writers. This is your story and it goes where you take it. Do not be put off by anyone telling you to give in or take up knitting. I'm sure there are lots who read and never comment and that is something that is a real shame. I read a story earlier that has very few comments. I counted the last seven and it went back ten years. Being an author is not easy. I thank you for your time and would like more please.