All Comments on 'Husband Wife and Incest with Sibling'

Spelling ? editor ? structure ?

Please don't continue it without a good editor and a spell checker.

use spell check or an editor other wise keep going

Amateurish at best. Terrible really.

Minimal improvement since your first attempt at a story

Spell check is of little use when you've used the wrong words.

Do not worry a lot about the grammar, and other issues like spelling at this point. You are very talented and please keep at it. You can have your work edited, but work like yours, (BELIEVABLE) is hard to find on this site. You tell this as if it really did happen and that is what got you a rating of 5 on this one. I was being very liberal with the rating because either I overlooked or you left out the description of pussy hair (do not ever do that in incest stories). Sisters, Moms, and aunts, are just hairy there! Shaved mounds along with silly nasty razor burn do not and will never belong in incest stories. Incest just happens, its not planned and ladies, especially stories about older mature ladies - (mom's and mother's=in-law). They do not say, "oh wait let me go shave my cunt for you then we will continue." So do list the pussy hair, the color, how abundantly thick, trimmed or full bush it is. But never depict incest pussy as shaved except when it is planned and involves a wife and her husbands sister or his mom or the wife's own mom and rubbing clits together to squirting orgasms happen while he watches awaiting to lick them clean. Only at times like then is there a need for pussy mounds to be extra smooth and slick. But keep in mind, the next morning its a mess of stubble, pimples, and infected hairs. Not something many readers want to visualize as they read. Avoid shaved pussies in stories all together if you can.