All Comments on 'Hypnotized by the Pool?! Pt. 05'

I like your concept and keep looking forward to each chapter. However, you still seem to have a problem proofreading/ Editing the work. Ie. "A piece of her was Cassie's now." clearly you meant that a piece of her belonged to Mia now. Its really distracting, hard to follow when you loose track of which characters you are talking about. When I instantly pick up errors like this, proof reading/ or having an editor look over it before you submit the work will save you a lot of grief.

Very much enjoying it. I'd love to meet a girl like Cassie.

I am enjoying the series very much thank you!