All Comments on 'I Kissed a Girl Pt. 01'

I accept that this is only the first chapter but it was so short. It seemed you were in a hurry to get down to the sex. Please take more time to tell us about the great friend and also the one telling the story. This way you provide greater depth to your writing.

What you have written shows that you have the talent. Look forward to your second chapter.

Better add more to your title as this will be compared and Identified to the previous story with the same Title. Better make your own mark!