by dreamofyou
Still a good premise.
Still just setting up.
A bit too much about the house rules, but understood.
Four stars.
Really enjoying the buildup. Believable and well written. Looking forward to more !
"Andy's ongoing adventure into female cock lust" uhm is this story about a trans woman?
Love it. I love the slow build up. I can't wait for more. I hate the way you identified some of the speakers before they speak. It's unnecessary and amateurish. You're a good writer and can do better!
I’m liking this story and your writing style. The anticipation is fun, but teasing (both literally and metaphorically) can easily cross the line between being erotic and being frustrating. Don’t take it too far. Looking forward to the next chapter.
I found this today and have read all of the sections. I'm loving it. It is a fun read. I love the interplay of sexual tension between Jill and Andy, Andy's appreciation of Ashley's teenage beauty and the respect he has and is showing for both of them. This story has some great potential.
THANK YOU
Love the tension that's building between Andy and Jill and I'm really enjoying the build up of the entire story.
Dude, the buildup of this story is fantastic. 3 chapters in, no sex yet, and it’s one of the more interesting and captivating stories I have come across in a while. I’m looking forward to reading the rest.